Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, clarity and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence (past tense), use correct verb forms, avoid repetition, and add one concise supporting detail. Include a linking phrase if adding more info. Keep to maximum five sentences.

예시: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. I loved riding it around the neighborhood, especially in the evenings when my parents were asleep. Because the streets were quiet then, I felt free and safe to practice new tricks.

제안: Give a direct, well-structured response using clear comparison and specific examples. Use correct tense and word order, avoid unclear phrases like "the country I grow in it," and use linking words (however, although, for example). Limit to up to five sentences.

예시: Not really — motorcycles are much more popular in my country. However, bicycles are commonly used by athletes and people who cycle for sport or recreation. For example, many cities hold cycling events and clubs where men and women train and travel long distances.

× Yes, I have a bicycle when I was young and and I loved that very love and I remember that when my father and my mother is asleep.

✓ Yes, I had a bicycle when I was young, and I loved it very much, and I remember that when my father and mother were asleep.

Mixed tenses and verb forms: the sentence refers to past events so present tense 'have' is incorrect; use past 'had' (Grammar Problem Type ID 6). 'Love' should be past 'loved' which is already present but phrased poorly; replace 'that very love' with 'it very much' for correct object and adverb use (Grammar Problem Type ID 13). 'My father and my mother is asleep' has subject-verb agreement error: plural subject requires 'were' not 'is' (Grammar Problem Type ID 27). Also remove duplicate 'and'. Suggestions: keep consistent past tense for past events, use correct object pronoun 'it', use adverb 'very much', and match verb number to subject (use 'were').

× No, the country, I grow in it, the motorcycle is popular and the bike, it's not popular, but the athletics athletes and the sports of men and women used bike to go around the world.

✓ No. In the country I grew up in, motorcycles are popular and bicycles are not, but athletes and people who do sports use bikes to travel around the world.

Awkward and incorrect sentence structure: 'the country, I grow in it' should be past 'the country I grew up in' to match tense and idiom (Grammar Problem Type ID 6 and 26). 'The motorcycle is popular and the bike, it's not popular' has noun number and redundancy issues: use plural 'motorcycles are popular and bicycles are not' (Grammar Problem Type ID 1 and 27). 'The athletics athletes and the sports of men and women used bike' is ungrammatical: 'athletes' is enough and 'use' should be present simple for a general truth, not 'used' (Grammar Problem Type ID 6 and 5). Also 'used bike to go around the world' should be 'use bikes to travel around the world' and 'athletics athletes' is incorrect collocation (Grammar Problem Type ID 13 and 11). Suggestions: rephrase to a clear structure, use plural nouns for general statements, correct verb tense for habitual actions (present simple 'use'), and choose natural collocations ('athletes', 'use bikes', 'travel').