Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Content is relevant but grammar, vocabulary and coherence are poor. Begin with a clear topic sentence stating whether you had a bike. Then give 1–2 specific supporting details (who gave it, when, how you felt) using correct grammar and linking words. Keep it to no more than 3–4 sentences. For example, use past simple for past events (“I had a bike,” “my parents gave it to me”), and fix word choice errors (use “bike” not “boyfriend,” and “on my birthday” not “and my birthday”).

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents gave it to me as a surprise birthday present, and I remember being very excited. I used it to ride to school and around the neighborhood almost every day.

제안: The answer expresses an opinion but is unclear and contains grammar errors and contradictions (saying they are popular but 'not convenient'). Start with a clear topic sentence stating your opinion. Then give 1–2 specific reasons with linking words (for example, 'because', 'however', 'for instance'). Use comparative language correctly and avoid contradictions. Keep sentences concise and coherent.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are affordable and easy to park. For example, many people use bicycles for short trips in crowded cities, and there are more bike lanes now than in the past.

× Yes, absolutely. I had a boyfriend when I was held.

✓ Yes, absolutely. I had a bicycle when I was a child.

The student used the wrong noun 'boyfriend' and the incorrect phrase 'when I was held' which is ungrammatical. This is an incorrect use of pronouns/nouns and sentence structure (type 12 and 26). Replace with the intended noun 'bicycle' and correct time expression 'when I was a child' to match the question about having a bike as a child; this restores meaning and corrects pronoun/noun misuse.

× I was surprised gift by my parents and my birthday.

✓ I was surprised with a gift by my parents on my birthday.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and missing prepositions, causing a sentence structure error (type 26) and article/preposition issues (type 11/22). Use the passive phrasing 'I was surprised with a gift' or an active form 'My parents surprised me with a gift on my birthday.' Include the preposition 'on' before 'my birthday' to indicate time.

× Absolutely, why are popular in my country as they're not convenient and accessible as compared to cars and buses and also people provide more choices to the bikes as compared to other public transport.

✓ Absolutely. Bikes are not as popular in my country because they are less convenient and accessible than cars and buses, and people have more choices than bicycles when using public transport.

This sentence shows multiple problems: incorrect clause order, misuse of comparative structures, and unclear subject reference—overall sentence structure errors (type 26), incorrect comparison (type 19), and incorrect use of articles/pronouns (types 17/12). Correct comparative structure: 'not as ... as' and use 'than' for comparisons with cars and buses. Clarify that 'people have more choices than bicycles' or 'people choose other forms of public transport over bikes.' Split into clearer clauses and use 'bicycles' consistently.