Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise, use correct tense and simple accurate descriptions. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.”), then add one or two specific details connected with linking words. Correct factual errors (bikes have two wheels; training wheels are sometimes added) and avoid repetition. Keep answers to a maximum of 3–4 short sentences.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small red bicycle with training wheels, which helped me stay balanced at first. I used to ride it to the park every weekend and felt very independent.

제안: Answer directly and clearly, then give specific reasons with linking words. Use correct comparative language and grammar. For example say whether bikes are popular or not, then explain why using words like ‘because’ and ‘however’. Avoid unclear phrases like “contains a quiet risk.”

예시: Not really; cars are more popular in my country because people prefer them for safety and convenience. For example, many families drive long distances and public transport is limited, so cars are seen as more practical.

× Yes, when I am when I was a child. I have a bike.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I had a bike.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses and repeats phrases. The context is a past time ('when I was a child'), so verbs should be in the past tense. Change 'am' to 'was' and 'have' to 'had' to maintain consistent past tense. Also remove the repeated phrase 'when I'. Suggestion: Use consistent tense for the time frame mentioned, e.g., 'When I was a child, I had a bike.'.

× It's container, four wheels, 2 wheels, a side of the wheels that help me out to stay balanced while I'm riding my bike.

✓ It had two wheels and a side wheel that helped me stay balanced while I rode my bike.

The original uses awkward nouns and numbers and mixes present and past. 'It's container' is incorrect; probably intended to describe the bike's wheels. Use 'had' for past reference. '2' should be written as 'two' in formal text. 'a side of the wheels' is ungrammatical; use 'a side wheel' or 'training wheel'. Use past 'helped' and past continuous 'rode' or simple past 'rode' to match past context. Suggestion: Be specific and use correct nouns: 'It had two wheels and a training wheel that helped me stay balanced while I rode my bike.'.

× No, instead of bike.

✓ No, bikes are not very popular.

'Instead of bike' is ungrammatical and unclear. The examiner's question asks about general popularity (present simple). Use present simple to state a general truth: 'Bikes are not very popular.' Suggestion: Use clear subject and verb in present simple for general statements.

× The cars are more popular in my nation because of the safety rules as the car contains a quiet risk while driving instead of car.

✓ Cars are more popular in my country because of safety concerns; driving a car feels riskier than riding a bike.

Multiple problems: unnecessary definite article 'The' before 'cars' is awkward in this general statement (article error), 'nation' is better as 'country', and 'contains a quiet risk' is incorrect phraseology. 'Car' repeated awkwardly and 'instead of car' is meaningless. Also pronoun/reference issues: 'the car' vs 'a car' and comparisons need clarity. Use 'cars' without 'the' for general statements, replace 'contains a quiet risk' with 'feels riskier' or 'has higher risk', and express the comparison clearly: 'riskier than riding a bike.' Suggestion: Use clear comparative structure and appropriate nouns: 'Cars are more popular in my country because people worry about safety; driving a car can feel riskier than riding a bike.'.