Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant but needs better sentence structure, fewer repetitions, and more precise details. Keep answers under five sentences. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two supporting details using linking words. Correct small grammar errors (e.g., “when I was three or four,” “I practised near the corner of my street”).

예시: Yes, I did. I learned to ride a bike when I was about three or four years old, and I practised near the corner of my street. As a child I often rode with my older cousin, which helped me gain confidence quickly.

제안: The idea is useful but the response is grammatically unclear and vague. You should state your opinion directly, then give specific reasons and contrasting information using linking words (e.g., “However, now…”). Use correct grammar: “In the past they were not popular because there was little infrastructure,” and explain the change: “now bike-sharing and startups have made cycling more common.” Keep it to two or three sentences.

예시: In the past bicycles were not very popular because there was little infrastructure and people preferred cars. However, now cycling has grown due to bike-sharing schemes and cycling startups, so more people use bicycles for short trips.

× I learned to ride a bike when I was 3 or 4 years old and I used to practice around the corner around my house, like the junction of my house with.

✓ I learned to ride a bike when I was three or four years old, and I used to practice around the corner from my house, near the junction by my house.

The sentence mostly uses past tense correctly, but it contains awkward and unclear prepositional phrasing. '3 or 4' should be written as words in formal speech: 'three or four'. The phrase 'around the corner around my house' is repetitive; use 'around the corner from my house'. 'Like the junction of my house with' is incomplete and ungrammatical; replace with 'near the junction by my house' to express location clearly. Suggestion: write small numbers as words in spoken responses for clarity, avoid repeated prepositions, and complete location phrases (e.g., 'near the junction by my house').

× In the past is not popular because.

✓ In the past it was not popular because...

This sentence lacks a subject and uses incorrect tense/form. Use 'it was not popular' to refer to the past state. Also the clause is incomplete; add a reason after 'because'. Suggestion: include the subject 'it' when describing general situations and ensure the subordinate clause following 'because' is completed (e.g., 'because people did not support cycling').

× The world in my country is not support to ride by, but now it has a bicycle when tall startup.

✓ People in my country did not support riding bicycles before, but now there are many bicycle startups.

Original sentence contains wrong pronoun/ noun choices and ungrammatical phrases: 'The world in my country' is incorrect for 'people', 'is not support to ride by' is ungrammatical—use 'did not support riding bicycles' (past). 'Now it has a bicycle when tall startup' is unclear; likely meaning 'now there are many bicycle startups'. Choose 'people' as the correct subject and 'there are' to indicate existence of startups. Suggestion: use appropriate nouns (people) instead of 'world', use correct verb forms for support ('did not support'), and use 'there are' for existence statements. Make sure to use clear nouns like 'bicycle startups'.