Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer more natural by using correct tense and a clear topic sentence, then add a concise supporting detail. Avoid repetition and keep within 3–4 sentences. For example, begin with “Yes, I did” then give a past habit using past simple and a linking phrase like “for example” or “usually” properly placed. Also correct small grammar errors: “I usually used a bicycle to go to school.”

예시: Yes, I did. I usually used a bicycle to go to school when I was a child, which was a convenient and cheap way to travel. For example, I cycled about ten minutes each morning and it helped me stay active.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence answering the question, then add a specific reason and an example. Remove fillers (“well”, “uh”) and avoid repetition. Use plural/singular correctly and smoother linking words like “because” and “for example.”

예시: Yes, I think bicycles are very popular in Japan because they are practical and economical. For example, many people across generations — from my parents to my grandmother — use bikes for short trips and commuting.

× Yes, I did when I was a child. I usually use a bicycle to go to my school.

✓ Yes, I did when I was a child. I usually used a bicycle to go to my school.

The context describes habitual action in the past (when the speaker was a child), so the verb should be in the past tense. 'I usually use' is present tense and mismatches 'when I was a child.' Change to 'I usually used' to show past habitual action. Suggestion: consistently keep past tense for background details about childhood activities.

× I usually use a bicycle to go to my school.

✓ I usually used a bicycle to go to school.

The phrase 'go to my school' is grammatical but unnatural in this context; native speakers usually say 'go to school.' Also, ensure past tense 'used' to match the time frame. Suggestion: use 'go to school' for routine attendance and keep tense consistent.

× Well, I think in Japan it is very popular and used by many generation in in fact, uh, my father and mother and me and my younger sister and also my grandmother use it.

✓ Well, I think in Japan bicycles are very popular and are used by many generations. In fact, my father, my mother, my younger sister, my grandmother and I use them.

There are multiple issues: subject-verb agreement and number agreement. 'It is very popular' refers to 'bikes' (plural), so use 'bicycles are very popular.' 'Many generation' should be plural 'many generations.' Also pronoun order and list need correction: put 'I' last and use commas. Finally, use plural pronoun 'them' for 'bicycles.' Suggestions: ensure nouns and verbs agree in number, pluralize count nouns, and place 'I' at the end of lists of people.

× ...my father and mother and me and my younger sister and also my grandmother use it.

✓ ...my father, my mother, my younger sister, my grandmother, and I use them.

Use subject pronoun 'I' instead of 'me' when listing subjects performing the action. Also, 'it' is singular but refers to 'bicycles' (plural), so use 'them.' Suggestion: use subject pronouns in subject lists and match pronoun number to the noun they refer to.

× Well, I think in Japan it is very popular and used by many generation in in fact, uh, my father and mother and me and my younger sister and also my grandmother use it.

✓ Well, I think in Japan bicycles are very popular and are used by many generations. In fact, my father, my mother, my younger sister, my grandmother, and I use them.

The original sentence is run-on, repetitive ('in in fact'), and lacks clear clause boundaries. Break into two sentences: a general statement about popularity and a specific example about family. Remove filler words and correct word order. Suggestion: divide long ideas into separate sentences and remove hesitations for clarity.