Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and fluent: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitation and repetition, use correct grammar for age expressions, and add one brief specific detail. For example, say when you got it, who gave it, and one reason you liked it. Also avoid overlong clauses and double words (e.g., "which which", "and and").

예시: Yes. I got my first bike when I was nine — my father gave it to me for my birthday. It was a black Hero Honda and I loved it because it was lightweight and easy to ride around our neighborhood.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence, then add one or two clear reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and unclear phrasing. Use precise vocabulary (teenagers, young people) and explain why bikes are popular (cost, traffic, fuel efficiency, ease of parking).

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, especially among teenagers and young adults. This is because they are cheaper to buy and run, save time in heavy traffic, and are easier to park compared with cars.

× Uh, yes, from my early childhood when I was nine years old my dad gifted me a bike on my birthday which which was of Hero Honda company and and of black as it is very good in looking.

✓ Uh, yes. When I was nine years old, my dad gifted me a black Hero Honda bike for my birthday because it looked very good.

Errors: repeated words ('which which', 'and and'); awkward word order and phrasing ('of Hero Honda company', 'of black', 'very good in looking'). Grammar problem type: incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs (13) because the adjective 'black' and brand name should directly modify 'bike' and 'looked' should be used as an adjective phrase. Suggestions: remove duplicates, place adjectives before the noun ('black Hero Honda bike'), use 'for my birthday' for purpose, and use 'looked very good' or 'was very good-looking' for correct adjective use.

× Yes, in our country bikes are mostly recommended by the teenagers as as the people of of teenage mostly recommended bike for long drives except cars as bikes are more comfortable.

✓ Yes, in our country, teenagers mostly prefer bikes for long drives rather than cars because bikes are more comfortable.

Errors: repeated words ('as as', 'of of'), incorrect and clumsy pronoun/phrase 'the people of teenage', and unclear subject and object. Grammar problem type: incorrect use of pronouns (12) because 'the people of teenage' is ungrammatical and 'recommended by the teenagers' misuses passive voice and agents. Suggestions: use 'teenagers' as the subject, use 'prefer' instead of 'recommend' to express choice, and use 'rather than cars' to contrast choices; remove duplicates and add commas for clarity.