Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid repetition and keep sentences short (max 4–5). Correct tense and possessive forms (e.g. “my own” → “my own bike”) and articles are needed. For example, say you didn’t have one and explain specifically why (fear, lack of training, safety concerns) and finish with a clear future intention.

예시: No, I didn't have my own bike as a child because I was afraid of riding and my parents never taught me how to use one. However, I would like to buy a bike in the future once I take lessons and feel confident riding in traffic.

제안: Begin with a direct answer, then give a clear, specific reason using linking words (e.g. “because”, “so”, “for example”). Avoid double negatives and repetitions. Provide one concrete detail (cost, traffic, fuel efficiency) and a short example or result. Use correct articles and plural forms.

예시: Yes, definitely. Bikes are very popular in my country because many people cannot afford expensive cars, so they choose motorcycles as a cheaper way to commute. For example, students and small-business owners often use bikes to travel short distances and save money on fuel.

× No, I didn't have a bike my own when I was child because I don't have knowledge about the bike like like how we can start and how we can stop at any place and in any emergency.

✓ No, I didn't have my own bike when I was a child because I didn't know how to use a bike, such as how to start it and how to stop safely in any place or in an emergency.

This sentence has multiple issues: incorrect word order ('my own bike' instead of 'bike my own'), missing article and noun form ('a child' -> 'a child' but better 'when I was a child'), inconsistent tense (mixing past 'didn't have' with present 'I don't have knowledge' — should be past 'didn't know'), and awkward phrasing ('knowledge about the bike' and repeated 'like'). The corrected sentence uses past tense consistently, proper possessive adjective placement, clearer phrasing ('didn't know how to use a bike'), and replaces repeated or informal wording with concise expressions. Suggestion: keep tense consistent, place possessives before nouns, use simple clear verbs for abilities ('know how to...'), and avoid repetition.

× But in future I would like to, I would like to prefer purchase a bike my own.

✓ But in the future I would like to buy my own bike.

Errors include missing article ('in the future'), incorrect verb combination ('would like to prefer purchase' is redundant and ungrammatical), wrong verb form ('purchase' should be 'buy' or 'purchase' preceded by 'to'), and wrong possessive order ('bike my own' -> 'my own bike'). The corrected sentence uses a single, appropriate future-intention phrase 'would like to' plus the base verb 'buy', includes the article 'the', and places the possessive before the noun. Suggestion: avoid stacking modal phrases; choose one (e.g., 'would like to') and use correct word order for possession.

× Yes, definitely. The bikes are popular in my country because everyone, not everyone cannot afford a expensive car.

✓ Yes, definitely. Bikes are popular in my country because not everyone can afford an expensive car.

Problems: unnecessary definite article 'the' before plural general noun 'bikes' (use no article), a double negative 'everyone, not everyone cannot' is incorrect and redundant, and incorrect article 'a expensive' should be 'an expensive'. The correction removes 'the', fixes the negative to 'not everyone can afford', and uses 'an' before a vowel sound. Suggestion: use no article for general plural nouns, avoid double negatives, and choose 'a' or 'an' based on the following sound.

× That's why that's why some people prefer to purchase a bike because it is easy to travel one to two persons.

✓ That's why some people prefer to buy a bike because it is easy to travel with one or two persons.

Issues: repeated phrase 'That's why that's why', awkward verb choice 'prefer to purchase' (acceptable but wordy), and incorrect structure 'easy to travel one to two persons' which lacks preposition and proper expression. The correction removes repetition, streamlines the verb ('buy' instead of 'purchase'), and adds 'with' plus 'one or two persons' for clarity. Suggestion: avoid repetition, use appropriate prepositions ('travel with'), and express numerical ranges with 'one or two'.