Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, sentence structure and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct tense and word order, avoid repetition, and provide one or two specific supporting details with linking words. For example, say when exactly this happened and describe one concrete feeling or activity. Keep responses concise (no more than 3–4 sentences).

예시: No, I didn't have a bike as a child. When I started college, my father bought one for me, and I felt very excited because I could ride to campus and explore the neighborhood. Since then, I have used it regularly for short trips.

제안: Reduce hesitations and use clearer grammar and linking words. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then give two specific reasons with linking phrases (for example, “because” and “for instance”). Use plural/singular and pronouns correctly. Keep it natural and concise.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are inexpensive and convenient. For example, people often use bicycles to visit nearby shops or go to the park to meet friends, and students commonly ride them to school.

× After went to the college, my father bought a bike for me.

✓ After I went to college, my father bought a bike for me.

The sentence is missing the subject 'I' before the past tense verb 'went'. Also 'the college' is unnatural here; use 'college' without the article when speaking generally. Use the past tense construction 'After I went to college' to show the time sequence. Suggestion: Include the subject and remove unnecessary article: 'After I went to college...'.

× I was so excited after ride the site, after ride the bike I was.

✓ I was so excited after riding the bike and seeing the sights.

The verb 'ride' should be in the -ing form 'riding' after expressions like 'after'. 'Ride the site' is incorrect; the intended phrase is likely 'see the sights' or 'ride around the site'. The original repeats and has an incorrect word order. Correct structure: 'after riding the bike' and combine related ideas: 'and seeing the sights'. Suggestion: Use gerund after 'after' and correct vocabulary: 'after riding the bike and seeing the sights.'.

× if uh, someone have a bike, then he can visit nearest places and go to play field, play with friends and uh go for shopping in a market.

✓ if someone has a bike, they can visit nearby places, go to the playground, play with friends, and go shopping at the market.

With an indefinite subject like 'someone', the verb must be third person singular: 'has' not 'have'. Also pronoun 'he' can be replaced with gender-neutral 'they'. 'Nearest places' is awkward; use 'nearby places'. 'Go to play field' should be 'go to the playground'. 'Go for shopping in a market' should be 'go shopping at the market'. Ensure consistent verb forms and natural collocations. Suggestion: Use 'has' for third person singular, prefer 'they' for gender neutrality, and use natural prepositions: 'go shopping at the market'.