Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise, correct grammar and use linking words to make the answer coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, then briefly add one or two specific supporting details (when, who, what you enjoyed). Pay attention to past tense consistency and sentence boundaries to avoid run-on sentences.

예시: Yes, I did. I had a small bike with training wheels when I was about six, and I used to ride it almost every afternoon after school. I often rode around the neighborhood with my friends in the summer, which was great fun and helped me become confident on two wheels.

제안: Organize the answer: give a direct opinion, then support it with specific reasons and examples using linking words. Improve vocabulary (e.g., 'popular in cities and towns', 'parks', 'cost-effective', 'shared bike schemes') and correct grammar and word choice ('good for commuting/for exercise', 'we have bike-share schemes'). Avoid numbers that seem unrealistic without context.

예시: Yes, I think bicycles are very popular, especially in smaller towns and parks, because they are inexpensive and good for short trips or exercise. For example, our city has several bike-share schemes, such as Local Bike and HelloRide, where you can buy a day pass for around $2–$5, which makes cycling convenient and affordable for many people.

× Well yes, I had a small bike when I was a child, it had training wheels at 1st and I use it to ride around my neighborhood with my friends after school and I really almost every day in the summer time which was great fun and I love riding just when I grow up.

✓ Well yes, I had a small bike when I was a child. It had training wheels at first, and I used it to ride around my neighborhood with my friends after school. I rode it almost every day in the summertime, which was great fun, and I loved riding when I was growing up.

Multiple verbs refer to past time but some are incorrectly in present tense or inconsistent. Change 'use' to past 'used', 'really almost every day' rephrased to 'rode it almost every day', 'summer time' to 'summertime', and 'I love riding just when I grow up' to past 'I loved riding when I was growing up' to maintain past tense and clarity. Also split into shorter sentences to fix run-on sentence structure.

× it had training wheels at 1st

✓ It had training wheels at first

The phrase 'at 1st' is informal and uses a numeral; use the expression 'at first' (or 'first') as the correct prepositional phrase. Also spell out 'first' rather than '1st' in formal writing.

× So I think that makes the bike's popular here.

✓ So I think that makes bikes popular here.

The possessive 'bike's' is incorrect; the sentence aims to refer to bikes in general. Use the plural noun 'bikes' to agree with 'makes' and the intended meaning. This fixes subject-verb and noun form misuse.

× Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my cities, especially in the smaller towns and park because they are cheap and good for experience.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my city, especially in smaller towns and parks because they are cheap and good for commuting/for getting around.

'my cities' is likely incorrect; use singular 'my city' or specify if multiple cities. 'park' should be plural 'parks' if referring generally. 'good for experience' is unclear; replace with a natural collocation such as 'good for commuting' or 'good for getting around'. Pronoun/ noun choice and collocation improved for clarity.

× We have shared bike like local bike and hello ride.

✓ We have shared bikes like Local Bike and HelloRide.

'shared bike' should be plural 'shared bikes' when speaking generally. Also proper names of services should be capitalized and combined appropriately. This corrects the quantifier/noun number agreement.

× You can just pay for $20.00 for a whole day pass and this is very convenient and affordable for the citizens.

✓ You can just pay $20.00 for a whole-day pass, and this is very convenient and affordable for citizens.

Do not use 'pay for $20.00'—use 'pay $20.00'. 'a whole day pass' should be hyphenated 'whole-day pass' or 'day pass'. 'the citizens' is too definite; 'citizens' or 'residents' is more natural. These article and phrasing changes improve grammaticality and naturalness.