Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, accuracy and clarity. Start with a direct simple past sentence (I had...), correct verb forms and word choice, and add one or two brief supporting details using a linking word. Keep it natural and under five sentences.

예시: I had a bike when I was a child. My parents bought it for me as a birthday present, and I used to ride it every weekend around the park. It helped me learn balance and gave me confidence to cycle longer distances.

제안: Make the opinion clearer and more concise, correct phrasing (use 'my area' or 'my town'), and support your view with specific reasons and a linking word. Use varied vocabulary (e.g., 'common', 'unsafe', 'heavy traffic'). Keep to two or three sentences.

예시: Bikes are not very popular in my town because the streets are narrow and traffic is heavy. As a result, people prefer motorbikes or cars for safety and convenience.

× Yes, I have a bike when I'm a child, a sport by my parents as a gift to me.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child; it was given to me by my parents as a gift.

The student used present tense 'have' and 'I'm' for a past situation. This is a present tense issue (ID 6). Also 'a sport by my parents' is ungrammatical and needs passive 'given to me by my parents'. Use past simple 'had' and 'was' for events in the past, and form a clear passive phrase. Suggestion: use past tense for childhood events and a clear passive construction: 'It was given to me by my parents.'

× Bikes are not popular in my place because my place is too small to ride a bike on the streets and it's very dangerous if you ride a bike on the street.

✓ Bikes are not popular in my area because the streets are too narrow to ride a bike, and it is very dangerous to ride on them.

The original contains awkward repetition and tense/wording issues classified as present tense issue (ID 6) and sentence structure problems. Use 'area' instead of repeating 'my place', 'streets are too narrow' is clearer than 'my place is too small to ride a bike on the streets', and use the infinitive 'to ride' rather than conditional phrasing for a general statement. Also replace 'it's very dangerous if you ride a bike on the street' with the more natural 'it is very dangerous to ride on them.'

× The traffic is quite busy here.

✓ Traffic is quite heavy here.

This is a minor present tense/word choice issue (ID 6). While 'The traffic is quite busy here' is understandable, native speakers say 'Traffic is quite heavy here.' Dropping the definite article 'the' and using 'heavy' improves naturalness. Keep present simple for general facts.