Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and add one specific supporting detail (e.g., how you felt or what you did with the bike). Use linking words (for example, “then” or “so”) to structure the answer. Keep it to no more than 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes. I received a bike from my grandmother on my 7th birthday, which surprised me because I had wanted one for a long time. After getting it, I rode it every day around the neighborhood and learned to ride without training wheels within weeks.

제안: Give a clear direct answer, then support it with specific reasons and at least one example. Avoid awkward phrasing and repetition (e.g., “very very”). Use linking words like “because” and “for example.” Keep sentences compact and natural.

예시: Yes. Bicycles are quite popular in my country because cities are crowded and traffic is frequent, so many people choose bikes to save time. For example, commuters often cycle short distances to avoid traffic jams and reduce pollution.

× I often dreamt of having one, but on my 7th birthday my grandmother gifted me one and it was truly surprising to me because I've always dreamt of having one and then I got it as a present so it was much more pleasing and much more warming to me.

✓ I often dreamed of having one, but on my 7th birthday my grandmother gifted me one and it was truly surprising to me because I had always dreamed of having one, and then I got it as a present, so it was much more pleasing and much warmer to me.

The sentence mixes past simple, present perfect, and informal adjectives inconsistently. Use consistent past forms for past events: 'dreamt' is acceptable but 'dreamed' is more common in this context; more importantly, use past perfect 'had always dreamed' to show an earlier desire before the gift. 'Warming' as an adjective is unnatural; 'warmer' (comparative adjective) is correct. Also add commas to separate clauses for clarity. Suggestion: Use past simple and past perfect together when describing a past event that relates to an earlier state (I had always dreamed ... then I got it).

× Yes, as a country where I live in, bikes are often popular because population is so much dense and the pollution is also proportionally dense.

✓ Yes, in the country where I live, bikes are very popular because the population is so dense and pollution is also proportionally high.

The original uses redundant and incorrect preposition 'where I live in' (ending with in); correct form is 'in the country where I live' or 'in the country I live in'. 'Population is so much dense' is ungrammatical: use 'the population is so dense'. 'Pollution is proportionally dense' is awkward; pollution is described as 'high' or 'severe'. Use definite article 'the' before 'population' when referring to that country's population. Suggestion: Remove extra preposition, add 'the' for specific nouns, and choose appropriate adjective ('dense' for population, 'high' for pollution).

× So riding a bike is very very cool over here and very very normal here.

✓ So riding a bike is very common and accepted here.

The original sentence repeats 'very very' and mixes informal 'cool' with 'normal here', causing redundancy and awkwardness. 'Very common and accepted here' conveys the intended meaning succinctly and fits the formal tone of a speaking test. Suggestion: Avoid repetition and choose clearer collocations like 'common', 'normal', or 'popular'.