Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, tense consistency and fluency. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, avoid filler words (uh), correct verb forms and phrasing, and add one brief supporting detail (reason or consequence) using a linking word. Keep it under five sentences.

예시: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my parents didn’t allow me to ride one. As a result, I usually walked or used public transport to go to school.

제안: Give a clear, concise opinion and support it with specific reasons and examples. Remove hesitations and unclear phrasing. Use linking words (for example, because, therefore) and precise vocabulary (commute, affordable, environment). Aim for 2–3 coherent sentences.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient for short commutes. For example, many people ride bikes to work or to the market, especially in crowded cities where traffic is heavy.

× No, I don't have a bike when I was child, uh, because my parents, uh, do not allow for this.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my parents did not allow it.

The sentence mixes present simple ('don't have', 'do not allow') with a past time reference ('when I was a child'). Use past tense for both verbs to match the time frame: 'didn't have' and 'did not allow'. Also add the article 'a' before 'child' and replace the phrase 'allow for this' with the pronoun 'it' for naturalness. Suggestion: keep verb tenses consistent with time expressions (use past tense for past events) and use appropriate articles and pronouns.

× Uh, uh, yes, of course in my nation moved to our population, uh, bikes because, uh, people mostly use uh, bikes, uh, for traveling, uh, from home to job after as well as, uh, uh, another countries, etcetera.

✓ Yes, of course bikes are popular in my country because people mostly use them to travel from home to work and also in other countries.

The original has many tense and structure problems. Use present simple to state general facts: 'bikes are popular' and 'people mostly use them'. Replace incorrect phrases: 'in my nation moved to our population' is ungrammatical; say 'in my country'. Use 'travel to work' instead of 'from home to job after'. Use the pronoun 'them' for 'bikes'. Keep the sentence concise and use correct prepositions ('in other countries'). Suggestion: state general facts with simple present tense, use correct subject-verb order, appropriate pronouns, and common collocations like 'travel to work'.