Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant, with a good personal detail. To improve, make the tense consistent (use past simple: remember -> remembered is okay but prefer 'I remember' for present reflection or 'I remembered' consistently), reduce redundancy, and add one specific detail (e.g., where you learned or who helped) using a linking word to connect ideas. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: I had a bike my father gave me when I was five; it was the first vehicle I learned to ride. At first I felt excited but also a bit nervous, so my father practiced with me in the park until I could balance. As a result, learning to ride made me feel more confident and independent.

제안: Your response answers the question and gives reasons, but contains grammatical errors and some vague statements. Improve by correcting grammar (e.g., "on TV" not "on TV's", "a famous actor" or "famous actors and sportspeople"), avoid absolute claims like "everyone", and add one specific example or statistic. Use a linking word to show cause or contrast.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and practical for city traffic. For example, many manufacturers sponsor cricket and film events, and you can see bike adverts on TV and billboards. Therefore, biking is both a cultural trend and a convenient transport choice for many people.

× I remembered feeling excited and a bit nervous at the same time, but learning to ride that bike made me more confident and independent.

✓ I remember feeling excited and a bit nervous at the same time, but learning to ride that bike made me more confident and independent.

The verb 'remembered' places the sentence in simple past, which is acceptable for a past event, but the speaker uses a general reflection about that memory; in spoken English it is more natural to use the present simple 'remember' when reporting a past feeling as a present recollection. Change 'remembered' to 'remember' to convey that you still recall the feeling now. Suggestion: Use 'remember' for present recollection of past experiences and 'remembered' only when sequencing past events or reporting past-moment acts.

× There are many advertisements on TV's in which a famous actors and sportsmen promote bike culture and everyone in India loves bikes.

✓ There are many advertisements on TV in which famous actors and sportsmen promote bike culture, and everyone in India loves bikes.

Errors: 'TV's' incorrectly uses possessive/apostrophe; it should be 'TV' or 'television' with no apostrophe. 'a famous actors' mixes singular article 'a' with plural 'actors' — remove 'a' or make singular. Also 'a famous actors and sportsmen' is unclear; use 'famous actors and sportsmen' for plural. Added a comma before 'and' to separate clauses. Suggestion: Use 'on TV' for adverts broadcast on television and ensure articles agree in number with nouns (no 'a' before plural).