Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammatical accuracy, conciseness, and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, avoid repetition, and add one or two specific supporting details using a linking word. For example, replace fillers like “umm” with a brief pause and use precise vocabulary (e.g., “memories” instead of “memorized in my brain”).

예시: Yes, I did — I had a small blue bicycle when I was about seven. It gave me a lot of freedom, and as a result I spent many afternoons riding to the park with friends. Those memories are still vivid because we often raced each other and learned to fix flat tires together.

제안: Clarify and correct grammar, use linking words to structure reasons, and provide a specific example or comparison. Use correct nouns and prepositions (e.g., “country”, “because”, “prefer to use”). Avoid vague phrases like “more dangerous for them” — explain why (traffic, weather, distance).

예시: I don’t think bicycles are very popular in my country because it’s large and many journeys are long. Moreover, the climate is often cold and snowy, so people prefer to use the metro or cars. For instance, commuters in my city usually take the subway to avoid cycling on busy, icy roads.

× Yes I do. I had the bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I did. I had a bike when I was a child.

The examiner asked about the past ('Did you have... when you were a child?'), so the student should use past tense 'did' rather than present 'do'. Also use the indefinite article 'a' with 'bike'. Suggestion: use past simple for past habits and include articles appropriately.

× It was a really fun time.

✓ It was a really fun time.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable but is short and vague. For clearer expression, specify what was fun (for example, 'Those were really fun times'). Suggestion: use plural 'times' to refer to multiple memories or add detail.

× Fantastic moments umm that I memorized in my brain.

✓ They were fantastic moments that I remember clearly.

The original is fragmented and uses awkward phrasing 'memorized in my brain'. Use a complete sentence with subject and verb: 'They were fantastic moments' and prefer 'remember clearly' instead of 'memorized in my brain'. Suggestion: avoid filler words and use natural collocations like 'remember' or 'have vivid memories of'.

× I don't think so 'cause my counter is really big and it's really cold.

✓ I don't think so because my country is really big and it's quite cold.

The word 'counter' is a typographical error for 'country'. Also avoid contractions like ''cause' in formal or clear speech; use 'because'. 'Quite' fits better than repeating 'really'. Suggestion: check word choice and pronunciation to avoid homophone errors.

× So I think people just more like use metro or cars.

✓ So I think people prefer to use the metro or cars more.

Word order and verb form are incorrect. Use 'prefer to use' or 'are more likely to use'. Place adverb 'more' after the verb phrase or use 'prefer'. Suggestion: use 'prefer to' + base verb or 'are more likely to' + base verb.

× Bicycles are more dangerous for them.

✓ Bicycles are more dangerous for them.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable, though more natural phrasing is 'Bicycles are more dangerous for people' or 'for them' is okay if referring to the general population. No article error here. Suggestion: clarify referent if needed (e.g., 'for most people in my country').