Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, sentence structure and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add one or two supporting details (brief and specific) using linking words. Correct common errors: use past tense 'I had', avoid run-on phrasing, and give a short detail (e.g., why you liked it or a memory). Keep to a maximum of 3–4 short sentences.

예시: Yes, I had a small bicycle when I was a child. It was bright blue and I learned to ride it in my neighborhood park. I loved it because it made me feel independent and I often rode it with my friends after school.

제안: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with specific reasons using linking words. Use correct grammar and vocabulary: say 'Yes, I think so' or 'No, I don't think so.' Use plural/singular correctly (e.g., 'children') and avoid unclear phrasing. Provide one or two concise, specific reasons (e.g., affordability, traffic, environment) and use linking words such as 'because' or 'for example'.

예시: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient for short trips. For example, many students and workers use bikes to commute to school or nearby markets, and this helps them avoid traffic and save money.

× I have but it's a small and it's a long time ago.

✓ I had one, but it was small and that was a long time ago.

The speaker is talking about the past (childhood), so present tense 'have' is incorrect. Use past simple 'had' and 'was' to match the time reference. Also replace 'it's a long time ago' with 'that was a long time ago' to refer back to the past event and improve cohesion. Suggestion: use past simple verbs when describing past events and keep pronoun references consistent (one/that).

× Yes, is it is because there's have no transportation for the child children like me?

✓ Yes, I think so because there was no transportation for children like me.

Multiple issues: incorrect pronoun order and form 'is it is' is ungrammatical, and 'there's have' mixes 'there is' with 'have'. The speaker refers to past lack of transport, so use 'there was no transportation'. Use 'children' (plural) for general reference, not 'child children'. Also begin with 'I think so' to express opinion. Suggestion: simplify to 'Yes, I think so because there was no transportation for children like me.'