Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 문법과 문장구조를 명확히 하고 반복되는 말과 어색한 표현을 제거하세요. 예를 들어 과거 경험을 이야기할 때는 과거 시제를 일관되게 사용하고, 문장을 간결한 주제 문장과 필요할 때 한두 문장의 세부 설명으로 구성하세요. 연결어를 사용해 이유와 결과를 더 명확히 제시하세요. 또한 소유격·대명사 사용(‘my neighborhood', 'who's riding' → 'people in my neighborhood who were riding')과 동사 시제(‘bring' → 'brought')를 고치세요.

예시: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. I often watched people in my neighborhood riding their bikes, and I thought it looked wonderful, so my mother enrolled me in a cycling class. After that, I learned how to balance and gained more confidence riding around the park.

제안: 주장 제시 후 구체적인 이유와 통계 사용은 좋지만 문법과 표현을 다듬어 자연스럽게 말하세요. 나라 이름 앞뒤의 관사와 어순을 정리하고, 통계나 지리적 설명은 명확한 표현으로 연결어로 이어 말하세요. 예: 'Korea'에는 정관사 불필요, '70% of the land in Korea'처럼 표현. 또한 한두 문장으로 간단히 확장해 의견을 명확히 하세요.

예시: I don't think bicycles are very popular in Korea. One reason is that about 70% of the land is mountainous, which makes cycling difficult in many areas, so most people prefer cars or public transport for daily travel.

× Yes, I had it when I was young. Umm, I saw I saw some some of my neighborhood who's riding a bike. I I just thought it was so stunning. So my mom bring me to your biking class for me.

✓ Yes, I had one when I was young. Umm, I saw some people in my neighborhood riding bikes. I just thought it was so amazing. So my mom brought me to a biking class.

The sentence contains multiple past tense errors and word choice/repetition issues. 'I had it' is acceptable but 'one' sounds more natural for 'a bike'. 'I saw I saw some some' is repetition and should be reduced to 'I saw'. 'who's riding a bike' is incorrect because it mixes relative clause with progressive; use 'riding bikes' or 'who were riding bikes'. The main verb in the last clause should be past tense: 'bring' -> 'brought' because the action occurred in the past. Also 'your biking class for me' is awkward; 'a biking class' is clearer. Suggestions: remove repeated words, use past tense consistently for past events, choose natural nouns ('one', 'people'), and simplify clauses to avoid incorrect relative or progressive forms.

× No, it's not popular in my country. In my case, I used to live in Korea and you know the Korea is. I mean the 70% of Koreans land is part of a mountain so it's hard to ride a bike.

✓ No, they are not very popular in my country. I used to live in Korea, and about 70% of Korea's land is mountainous, so it's hard to ride a bike.

Issues include incorrect agreement and article use and awkward phrasing. 'It's not popular' refers to 'bikes' (plural), so use 'they are not very popular'. 'You know the Korea is' is ungrammatical and unnecessary; instead combine ideas: 'I used to live in Korea, and about 70% of Korea's land is mountainous.' 'The 70% of Koreans land' is incorrect: use 'about 70% of Korea's land' or '70% of the land in Korea'. 'Part of a mountain' is wrong; use adjective 'mountainous'. Suggestions: match number (singular/plural), use possessive form for country land (Korea's land), use 'about' for approximate percentages, and use the adjective 'mountainous' for clarity.