Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce hesitations and repetition, correct vocabulary and sentence structure, and give one clear supporting detail. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one specific detail using a linking phrase. Avoid filler words (umm, uh) and keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a very small red bike with training wheels, which made it comfortable and easy for me to learn to ride.

제안: Make the reply grammatical and precise, use linking words to explain reasons, and provide a specific example or contrast. Start with a clear opinion sentence, then add a reason introduced by 'because' or 'for example'. Avoid mispronounced or incorrect words.

예시: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because many people find them cheaper and easier to park. For example, commuters often use bicycles for short trips in crowded cities to save time and money.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The sentence repeats the phrase 'when I was' unnecessarily (sentence structure error related to past tense expression). Remove the duplicated phrase to make a correct past-tense statement. Suggestion: say 'I had a bike when I was a child.' to be concise and grammatically correct.

× Umm, it was umm, it was a very it was a very small wine.

✓ It was a very small one.

The original contains repeated fragments and the word 'wine' is likely a mispronunciation of 'one'. This is a sentence structure and word choice error. Use a single clear clause: 'It was a very small one.' If you mean a small bicycle, you could say 'It was a very small bike.'

× So this is which was a very comfortable to write.

✓ It was very comfortable to ride.

The sentence has incorrect relative pronoun 'which', wrong verb 'write' instead of 'ride', and awkward structure. Correct the verb and simplify the clause: 'It was very comfortable to ride.' This fixes verb choice and sentence structure.

× Uh, yes, I think a boy saw a popular in my country because umm, the people prefer riding bikes rather than, umm, driving cars, which is a very umm, comfortable.

✓ Yes, I think bicycles are popular in my country because people prefer riding bikes rather than driving cars, which is much more comfortable.

Multiple issues: 'a boy saw a popular' is meaningless and likely attempts to say 'bikes are popular' (subject and plurality errors). Use present simple 'are' for general fact. Replace 'the people' with 'people' for natural generalization. 'Which is a very comfortable' is incorrect adjective use and comparison; 'much more comfortable' or 'more comfortable' is appropriate. Overall, rewrite the sentence for correct subject-verb agreement, tense, and adjective use.