Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and accurate: begin with a clear topic sentence, correct the age detail (17 is not childhood), and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid redundancy ("bicycle" and "bike" used close together) and keep to under five sentences.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small red bicycle my parents gave me for my seventh birthday, and I loved riding it around our neighborhood with friends. For example, we would race each other to the park every Sunday, which made weekends really fun.

제안: Make the response more natural and accurate: start with a clear topic sentence, use correct grammar ("bikes are popular" not "my bikes are popular"), give a reason with a linking word and a specific example, and avoid vague or awkward phrasing about wealth.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. One reason is that many people find them more affordable than cars, so they are common for short journeys; for instance, students and market vendors often use bicycles to travel around cities.

× Yes, my bikes are popular in my country because my country is not so much wealthy that everyone could afford a car.

✓ Yes, bicycles are popular in my country because my country is not wealthy enough for everyone to afford a car.

The original sentence uses 'my bikes' incorrectly; it should refer generally to the category 'bicycles' (plural noun without possessive). Also the clause 'not so much wealthy that everyone could afford a car' is ungrammatical. Use the comparative structure 'not wealthy enough for everyone to afford' to express insufficient wealth. Suggestion: use general noun (bicycles) and the fixed pattern 'not X enough for Y to do Z'. Grammar issues identified: singular/plural misuse and incorrect sentence structure affecting meaning; corrected to match natural English and maintain tense.