Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は短く直接的ですが、発音や語彙選択、文の流れに改善が必要です。例えば「grand grandmother」は不自然なので「great-grandmother」を使うべきです。また“taught me how to ride, ride on the bike”の繰り返しは冗長なので一度で十分です。文法的には過去形で統一されていますが、接続詞でつなぐと自然さが増します。改善点としては、トピック文→補足（誰に教わったか、どれくらい練習したか、何を感じたか）の順で、接続詞（so, and, because, so that）や時表現（when I was about X years old）を使って具体性を加えることです。

예시: Yes, I did. My great-grandmother taught me how to ride when I was about six, and I practiced every day so I could become confident riding on my own.

제안: 意味が伝わりにくく、語彙や文法の誤りが多く見られます。まず「Lighting a buzzy」「Loading a bike」は不明確な表現なので、代わりに“cycling is a common/ popular/ convenient mode of transport”など正しい語彙を使いましょう。意見を述べたら、理由を1〜2文で具体的に示してください（例えば経済性、環境に優しい、交通渋滞回避など）。接続詞（because, so, therefore）を使って論理的につなぐと良いです。

예시: Yes, I think cycling is quite popular in my country because it is cheap and practical for short trips, and many people use bikes to avoid traffic and save money on transport.

× 'Yes, I did. When I was a child, my grand grandmother often taught me how to ride, ride on the bike, and I practiced every day.'

✓ 'Yes, I did. When I was a child, my great-grandmother often taught me how to ride a bike, and I practiced every day.'

'Sentence contains subject-verb agreement and word choice issues. "grand grandmother" is incorrect; the correct term is "great-grandmother". "ride, ride on the bike" is redundant and awkward; use "ride a bike". Also remove the comma splice by connecting clauses with "and". Suggestion: use concise noun phrases ("a bike") and coordinate clauses properly.'

× 'Yeah, I think so. Lighting a buzzy is the easy to easy way. Loading a bike is the way. The easiest, easy.'

✓ 'Yes, I think so. Riding a bicycle is an easy and convenient way to travel. It is often the easiest option.'

'Original contains multiple problems: incorrect word choice ("Lighting a buzzy", "Loading a bike"), sentence structure errors, and awkward adjective use. Replace with clear verbs and nouns: "riding a bicycle" and use adjectives correctly ("an easy and convenient way"). Combine and reorder to form complete, coherent sentences. Suggestion: choose correct vocabulary (bicycle, ride), use articles (an easy), and form full sentences.'