Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid filler words (um, do I) and tense inconsistencies. Use linking words (because, so) to connect ideas and keep sentences under five. Correct past-tense usage throughout.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents bought it for me, but I rarely rode it because I preferred playing with my friends and other toys. As a result, I didn't become interested in cycling until later.

제안: Good content and clear reasons. Improve by varying vocabulary (e.g., commuters, economical), using one or two linking phrases for coherence, and adding a specific example or brief statistic to make the answer more concrete. Keep sentences natural and avoid small grammar slips (it → they when referring to 'people').

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Many people use bicycles for short commutes and running errands because they are economical and save on petrol. For example, in my city a lot of office workers cycle to work during the week, especially in crowded areas where parking is difficult.

× Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child, it was bought by my parents but I don't use it enough when I was a kid because I kept umm do I keep playing around? And I don't usually like bikes when I was a kid.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was bought by my parents, but I didn't use it much when I was a kid because I kept playing around. I didn't usually like bikes when I was a child.

Multiple verbs refer to past time, so past tense must be used consistently. 'Did have' is grammatically acceptable but redundant; 'had' is simpler. 'Don't use' and 'I don't usually like' are present-tense forms and conflict with past context; they should be 'didn't use' and 'didn't usually like'. 'Keep umm do I keep playing around?' is informal and ungrammatical — use 'kept playing around' to indicate repeated past action. Also split into sentences for clarity. Suggestions: use past simple for past events (had, was, didn't use, didn't like), remove filler words, and break run-on sentences into separate sentences.

× People use it for short commutes and running errands because they're convenient and inexpensive to run, and it helps them to save fuel and on petrol costs.

✓ People use them for short commutes and running errands because they're convenient and inexpensive to run, and they help people save fuel and petrol costs.

Pronoun disagreement: 'People' is plural, so the pronoun referring to bikes should be plural ('them'), not 'it'. Also 'it helps them to save fuel and on petrol costs' mixes pronouns and adds redundant preposition 'on'. Replacing with 'they help people save fuel and petrol costs' fixes reference and grammar. Suggestions: ensure pronouns agree in number with their antecedents, avoid redundant prepositions, and keep pronoun references clear.

× They're also easier to park.

✓ Bikes are also easier to park.

Using 'they're' is grammatically acceptable, but in a formal spoken reply it's clearer to repeat the noun 'bikes' or keep 'they're' only if antecedent is clear. This suggestion clarifies reference and avoids ambiguity. Suggestion: maintain clear antecedent for pronouns; if sentence stands alone, repeat the noun.