Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then briefly explain the reason with correct grammar and a linking word. Avoid filler words and correct tense/structure (e.g., 'fall off' not 'fall out of').

예시: No, I didn't. My father thought I might fall off the bike, so he preferred I use shoes and play on safer equipment instead.

제안: Reduce hesitation, use one clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details with linking words. Give concrete examples or comparisons and avoid repeating phrases like 'in my country'.

예시: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country. For example, most people prefer cars or motorcycles for commuting because the roads are long and public transport is unreliable, so bikes are mainly used for short trips or by delivery riders.

× No, I didn't have a bike because my father was afraid that I fall out of the bike.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike because my father was afraid that I would fall off the bike.

The sentence reports a past fear about a past possibility, so the subordinate verb should be in a past-in-the-past form (would fall) rather than simple present (fall). Also, the correct phrasal verb is 'fall off' rather than 'fall out of' when referring to falling from a bicycle. Suggestion: use 'would fall off the bike' to match the past context and common collocation.

× No, I didn't have a bike because my father was afraid that I fall out of the bike.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike because my father was afraid that I would fall off the bike.

The phrase 'the bike' is odd here because no specific bike was mentioned; however, 'the bike' can be acceptable if referring to a generic concept. Better style is to use 'a bike' or 'the bike' consistently. In the corrected sentence 'the bike' is kept but could be changed to 'a bike' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'a bike' or 'the bike' consistently and prefer 'a bike' when talking generally.

× Most of the people in my country, uh, use cars or, uh, motorcycles to commute, uh, to the work or shopping centers.

✓ Most people in my country use cars or motorcycles to commute to work or to shopping centers.

'Most of the people' is wordy; 'most people' is more natural. The phrase 'to the work' is incorrect—'to work' is the correct collocation without the definite article. Also remove filler 'uh' and duplicate commas. Suggestion: say 'commute to work' and omit unnecessary articles and fillers.

× Most of the people in my country, uh, use cars or, uh, motorcycles to commute, uh, to the work or shopping centers.

✓ Most people in my country use cars or motorcycles to commute to work or to shopping centers.

The original contains redundant commas and filler words that disrupt pronoun and noun flow; while not a direct pronoun error, improving pronoun/noun reference and removing fillers clarifies meaning. Suggestion: remove fillers and streamline the noun phrase as 'Most people in my country'.