Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce hesitation and repetition, start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using a linking word. Keep it natural and concise (maximum 4–5 short sentences). Also vary vocabulary and avoid repeating the same phrase.

예시: Yes, I did. I had a small bicycle that my parents bought me when I was about ten, and I learned to ride it in the park near our house. Because the park had smooth paths and few cars, I felt safe practicing there, and I used the bike for fun and short trips to visit friends.

제안: Good content and clear reasons. Improve by removing filler phrases like “to be honest,” and add a linking word to structure the explanation. Include a brief specific example or comparison to make the point more concrete and natural.

예시: No, bicycles are not very popular in my country because the roads are unsafe for cyclists and there is little government support for bike lanes. For example, many streets lack dedicated cycle paths, so most people choose cars or motorbikes for daily commuting.

× Uh, yes, I did. Uh, I always wanted a bike. Uh, I always wanted a bike. Uh, and when I was about 10 years old, my parents bought me a small, small bike and I learned to ride in the park near our house.

✓ Uh, yes, I did. I always wanted a bike, and when I was about 10 years old my parents bought me a small bike, and I learned to ride in the park near our house.

Grammar problem type ID:26 (Sentence structure errors). The original contains unnecessary repetition ('I always wanted a bike' repeated) and a duplicated filler 'small, small' which disrupt fluency and clarity. Remove repeated phrases and redundant adjectives to produce a single coherent sentence. Suggestion: avoid repeating the same clause twice and use one adjective once (small bike). Maintain past tense consistency ('wanted', 'bought', 'learned').

× Uh, to be honest, the bicycles are not very popular in my country because the roads are not safe for cyclists and there is little government support for cycling infrastructure.

✓ Uh, to be honest, bicycles are not very popular in my country because the roads are not safe for cyclists and there is little government support for cycling infrastructure.

Grammar problem type ID:22 (Article errors). Using the definite article 'the' before 'bicycles' implies a specific group; here the speaker means bicycles in general. Remove 'the' to correctly refer to the general category. The rest of the sentence is grammatically correct; tense and agreement are appropriate.

× As a result, most people prefer cars or motorbikes for daily transport.

✓ As a result, most people prefer cars or motorbikes for daily transport.

Grammar problem type ID:1 (Singular and plural issue). This sentence is actually correct as written; 'cars or motorbikes' appropriately uses plural nouns to indicate common choices. No correction necessary. Explanation: subject 'most people' matches plural noun choices; keep plural nouns.