Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar and sentence structure: use past tense consistently, avoid fillers, and make sentences concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Replace vague phrasing with precise words (e.g., "ride" instead of "drive by", "black" instead of "black colour").

예시: Yes. I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small black bicycle that I rode almost every day to visit my friends. Because it was lightweight, I could ride it easily around the neighborhood and I remember feeling proud when I learned to ride without training wheels.

제안: Clarify meaning and use accurate vocabulary and linking words. Avoid filler sounds and incorrect words ("famous" → "popular", "nations" → "country", "vanguard" unclear). Give one clear reason and one specific example. Use connectors like "because" or "for example" to make your point coherent.

예시: Yes, I think bicycles are very popular in my country because they are cheap and good for short journeys. For example, many students and older people cycle to school or the market, and people often say cycling helps them relax and stay healthy.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was a child, uh, I love to drive by and I have a black colour bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I loved to ride it, and it was black.

The original mixes present tense ('have', 'love') with past time reference ('when I was a child'). Use past tense consistently for past events: 'had' and 'loved'. 'Drive by' is incorrect for bicycles; use 'ride'. 'Black colour bike' is ungrammatical—say 'it was black' or 'a black bike'. Also split into two sentences for clarity.

× Yes, uh, I think bikes are famous in my nations because all young people and old people vanguard, uh, all people are drive a bike because they feel good and feel refreshed.

✓ Yes, I think bicycles are popular in my country because young and old people often ride bikes; many people do so because they feel good and refreshed.

Use singular 'country' rather than 'nations' when referring to the speaker's country. 'Bikes' is acceptable but 'bicycles' is more formal. 'Famous' is the wrong adjective for popularity—use 'popular'. 'All people are drive a bike' has subject-verb and verb form errors; correct to 'people often ride bikes' or 'many people ride bikes'. Remove 'vanguard' which is irrelevant. Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct verb forms ('ride' not 'drive' for bikes).