Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammatical errors, avoid filler sounds, and give one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words (e.g., "and", "so") to connect ideas. Also correct time expression: say "when I was three" or "at three years old."

예시: Yes, I did. I received a bicycle from my aunt when I was three, and I grew up riding it around my neighborhood. Even now, I still enjoy cycling on weekends because it helps me relax and keeps me fit.

제안: Clarify vocabulary and grammar, remove fillers, and give specific examples. Use linking words like "because" and "for example". Replace unclear words ("bag", "back") with correct terms ("bike", "shared bikes"). Provide one clear reason and one example.

예시: Absolutely. Bikes are very popular in China because many people commute by bicycle, especially in cities. For example, shared-bike services like Mobike and Ofo are everywhere, so people often use them for short trips to work or the store.

× I got a bicycle from my aunt when I was in three years old.

✓ I got a bicycle from my aunt when I was three years old.

The phrase 'in three years old' is incorrect for indicating age in the past. Use 'when I was three years old' to state age. Remove 'in' before the age and keep the past tense 'got'. Suggestion: Use the pattern 'when I was + age' for past age references.

× And until now, uh, I still have the hobby of going back.

✓ And until now, I still have the hobby of riding bikes.

The original sentence uses 'going back' which is unclear and awkward. The student likely means they still enjoy cycling. Use present simple 'I still have the hobby of riding bikes' to express an ongoing hobby. 'Hobby of riding bikes' is more natural. Suggestion: Use 'I still enjoy riding bikes' or 'I still have a hobby of cycling' for clarity.

× Absolutely, yes. Umm, the bag is really, uh, popular in China, umm, because there are lots of people, uh, go to work by bicycle, uh, and there are lots of uh, sharing back on the streets in my country.

✓ Absolutely. Bicycles are really popular in China because many people go to work by bicycle, and there are many shared bikes on the streets in my country.

Multiple problems: 'the bag' is incorrect word choice—should be 'bicycles' or 'bikes'. The sentence also has subject-verb structure errors: 'there are lots of people go to work' should be 'many people go to work' or 'there are lots of people who go to work'. 'sharing back' is incorrect; likely 'shared bikes' or 'bike-sharing services' is intended. Corrections: replace 'the bag' with 'bicycles', use 'many people go to work by bicycle' for natural syntax, and 'many shared bikes' or 'bike-sharing services' for the second part. Suggestion: Use clear nouns ('bicycles', 'shared bikes') and correct clause structures such as 'many people go to work by bicycle' or 'there are many people who go to work by bicycle'.