Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise, accurate and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct factual or grammar mistakes, and avoid irrelevant phrases. Use linking words for sequencing and keep length to 2–4 sentences. Mention a realistic habit or memory with specific details (when, how often, who with) and correct tense and verb forms.

예시: Yes, I did. I had a bicycle throughout my childhood and used to ride it almost every day—sometimes up to 20 kilometres at weekends. I often rode with my friends and siblings, exploring local parks and quiet streets, which was one of my favourite pastimes.

제안: Improve grammatical accuracy and organization. Begin with a clear, direct statement, then support it with two specific reasons using linking phrases (for example, because/so/therefore). Use correct verb forms, singular/plural agreement, and natural collocations (e.g. "bicycles are popular", "reduce carbon emissions"). Avoid vague phrases like "Now it's the day."

예시: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country. They are widely used because they are cheap and help reduce carbon emissions, so cities are slightly less polluted. For these reasons, the government has been promoting cycling by building bike lanes and running awareness campaigns.

× I had a bike when I was to shower and I often rode it for about 20 kilometers a day because I really enjoyed cycling.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child and I often rode it for about 20 kilometers a day because I really enjoyed cycling.

The phrase 'when I was to shower' is incorrect and does not make sense in context. The speaker likely meant 'when I was a child.' Replace the incorrect phrase with 'when I was a child' to match past-tense context and meaning. Suggestion: Use clear time expressions for past events, e.g., 'when I was a child,' 'when I was young.'

× I usually went out with my friends and siblings and we like exploring nearby parks and streets together.

✓ I usually went out with my friends and siblings and we liked exploring nearby parks and streets together.

The sentence mixes past tense 'went' with present tense 'like.' To maintain consistent past narration, change 'like' to the past form 'liked.' Suggestion: Keep verbs in the same time frame when describing past habitual actions.

× Yes it does.

✓ Yes, it does.

There is a punctuation issue: a comma after 'Yes' improves clarity. Additionally, the pronoun referent is ambiguous: 'it' should refer to 'bikes' (plural), so agreement is better with 'they are' or 'yes, they are popular.' Suggestion: Use 'Yes, they are' or 'Yes, bicycles are' to clearly agree with the plural subject.

× Now it's the day.

✓ Nowadays,

'Now it's the day' is unidiomatic. The speaker likely intends to say 'nowadays' to talk about current trends. 'The day' with 'now' is incorrect usage. Suggestion: Use temporal adverbs like 'nowadays' or 'these days' to discuss present situations.

× Bike is essential in my country since it helped reduce carbon emissions.

✓ Bicycles are essential in my country since they help reduce carbon emissions.

'Bike is' is incorrect: use plural 'bicycles' or the general singular with an article 'a bike' or uncountable plural. Tense 'helped' (past) conflicts with present general statement; use present 'help.' Also use plural pronoun 'they' to refer back to 'bicycles.' Suggestion: For general truths, use simple present tense and correct noun number: 'Bicycles are essential... they help reduce...'.

× So pollution problem will be decreased and many people will have fresh air to breathe and environment will get better by using bikes.

✓ So pollution will decrease, many people will have fresher air to breathe, and the environment will get better by more people using bikes.

'Pollution problem will be decreased' is awkward: use active form 'pollution will decrease.' 'Fresh air' comparative should be 'fresher air.' 'Environment' needs the definite article 'the.' Also rephrase 'by using bikes' to 'by more people using bikes' for clarity. Suggestion: Use active constructions and correct articles; ensure adjective comparisons use comparative forms when appropriate.

× So government encourage more people to use bike.

✓ So the government encourages more people to use bikes.

Missing definite article 'the' before 'government.' Subject-verb agreement: 'government' as singular requires 'encourages.' 'Use bike' should be plural 'use bikes' or 'use a bike.' Suggestion: Add articles correctly, match verb forms to singular/plural subjects, and pluralize nouns when speaking generally.