Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, verb tenses and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and keep to 2–4 sentences. For example, say the bike’s color, size, who gave it to you, and a short reason why you liked it.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small pink bike that my parents gave me for my sixth birthday, and I loved it because it felt fast and made me feel independent.

제안: Clarify the main idea and use correct grammar and linking phrases. Begin with a clear opinion, then give specific reasons and a comparison if needed. Use simpler, accurate vocabulary (e.g., 'scooters' or 'electric bicycles') and correct verb forms. Keep it to 2–4 sentences.

예시: I don't think traditional bikes are very popular in my city. Because it is urban and crowded, most people prefer scooters or electric bikes for short trips, so bicycles are less common.

× Yes, I have a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

The question asks about the past ('when you were a child'), so the verb should be in the past tense. Use 'had' instead of 'have' to match the time frame. Suggestion: match verb tense to the time reference in the question (past for childhood).

× When I was a child that bike color is pink and small and that's bike present by my parents.

✓ When I was a child, the bike was pink and small, and it was a present from my parents.

Multiple problems: adjective order and article use plus tense and passive/phrasing. The bike's attributes should be described with 'the bike was pink and small' (past tense). Use 'a present from my parents' to show who gave it. 'That's bike present by my parents' is incorrect structure. Suggestion: use 'the' for a specific bike, past tense 'was', and 'a present from' for gifts.

× It was very adorable.

✓ It was very cute.

'Adorable' is grammatically acceptable, but in informal spoken English 'cute' is more natural. Also ensure it follows past tense as the preceding sentence. Suggestion: use natural adjective choice and maintain consistent past tense.

× I don't think so because my city is urban contrary in Japan and the most children or people used using kickboard or electric bike so I don't think it is popular in my country.

✓ I don't think so because my city is urban compared to most places in Japan, and most children and people use kickboards or electric bikes, so I don't think it is popular in my country.

Multiple tense and preposition issues. 'Contrary in Japan' is incorrect — use 'compared to most places in Japan' or 'compared with other areas in Japan'. 'The most children or people used using' has wrong aspect and article: use 'most children and people use' (present simple) to describe a general truth. 'Kickboard' in English is usually 'kickboard' or 'scooter'; ensure noun plurality 'kickboards'. Suggestion: use 'compared to' for contrast, present simple for habitual facts, and correct plural forms.