Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 문법과 어휘 선택에서 정확성이 필요합니다. 간단한 문장 구조로 시작하고 불필요한 반복(‘almost, uh’)과 말더듬을 줄이세요. 소유 표현(‘my parents gave me a bike’)을 정확히 사용하고, 나이와 선물 상황을 구체적으로 덧붙이면 더 자연스럽습니다. 예: 나이를 말할 때 ‘when I was eight’처럼 명확히 하고, 어떤 종류의 자전거였는지(예: 작은 자전거, 붐비는 장난감 자전거 등)를 덧붙이세요.

예시: Yes. When I was eight, my parents gave me a small red bicycle as a present. I remember feeling very excited because it allowed me to ride to my friend’s house by myself, and I practised every afternoon until I learned to balance properly.

제안: 문법(시제·주어-동사 일치)과 어순, 표현의 간결성이 필요합니다. ‘electric bikes’ 혹은 ‘e-bikes’라는 정확한 용어를 사용하고, ‘because’나 ‘since’ 같은 연결어로 이유를 자연스럽게 연결하세요. 반복을 피하고 구체적 예시(통근, 배달 서비스 등)를 추가하면 설득력이 높아집니다.

예시: Yes, definitely. In South Korea, e-bikes have become very popular because they are convenient for short commutes and save energy. For example, many people use them to travel to work or to make deliveries in busy urban areas, which has increased their popularity recently.

× Yes, uh, when I was young, almost, uh, almost, uh, eight years old, my parents gave my parents boat bikes to me as a gift.

✓ Yes, when I was young, almost eight years old, my parents gave me a bicycle as a gift.

The sentence incorrectly repeats 'my parents' and uses an unclear phrase 'boat bikes to me.' Replace the repetition with the correct indirect object 'me' and use the singular 'a bicycle' to match the intended meaning. Also remove filler words for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'gave me a bicycle' instead of 'gave my parents ... to me'. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× Yes, absolutely. As technology have developed or most people used to ride the bike using electricity.

✓ Yes, absolutely. As technology has developed, most people now ride electric bikes.

The verb 'have developed' does not agree with the singular subject 'technology'; use 'has developed'. 'Used to' implies past habit, which conflicts with the intended current trend; use 'now' or present simple. 'Ride the bike using electricity' is awkward; use 'ride electric bikes.' Suggestion: Use 'As technology has developed, most people now ride electric bikes.' Grammar problem type ID: 27

× So in my country Korea, South Korean electronic bicycle is very popular, is very popular around the people.

✓ So in my country, South Korea, electric bicycles are very popular among people.

'Korea, South Korean' is incorrect word order; use 'South Korea.' 'Electronic bicycle' is better expressed as 'electric bicycle' or 'electric bicycles.' Use plural 'bicycles' with 'are.' 'Around the people' is unnatural; use 'among people.' Also remove repeated 'is very popular.' Suggestion: 'In my country, South Korea, electric bicycles are very popular among people.' Grammar problem type ID: 22