Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, with a good personal example, but it has some grammatical errors, repetition, and slight awkward phrasing. To improve, make a short topic sentence that directly answers the question, then add one or two specific supporting details. Correct verb tenses (use past simple: “I had” or “I got”), avoid filler words, and eliminate redundant phrases. Keep the response within 3–4 sentences and use simple linking words (for example, “when” or “because”) to make it coherent.

예시: Yes, I had a bike as a child. I started learning to ride when I was about four or five, and my parents bought me a small pink bicycle. I remember feeling very happy because I could ride around the neighborhood by myself.

제안: The response addresses the question but is unclear in places and contains many hesitations and grammatical mistakes. Improve clarity by stating your opinion directly (e.g., “No, they are not very popular”), then give two specific reasons with linking words (for example, “because” and “therefore”). Avoid filler words, correct grammar (use plural/singular consistently), and replace vague phrases with concrete details (e.g., lack of cycling lanes, cultural preference for cars). Keep it to 2–3 sentences for coherence.

예시: No, bikes are not very popular in my country because most people prefer cars and there are few safe cycling lanes in cities. As a result, many people think driving is more convenient and safer than cycling.

× Yes, I would say I have a bike when I was a very little kid because I started to ride a bike when I was around four or five years old.

✓ Yes, I would say I had a bike when I was a very little kid because I started to ride a bike when I was around four or five years old.

The sentence mixes present tense 'have' with past time reference 'when I was a very little kid'. Use past tense 'had' to match the past time frame. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent by using past tense for both clauses when talking about past events.

× I vividly remember that my mom and dad bought me a pink bicycle, and in that scenario I was really happy about getting the bike.

✓ I vividly remember that my mom and dad bought me a pink bicycle, and in that moment I was really happy to get the bike.

The phrase 'in that scenario' is awkward and not idiomatic for a memory; 'scenario' refers to a hypothetical situation. Also 'happy about getting' is acceptable but 'happy to get' is more natural here. Suggestion: Use 'in that moment' or 'at that time' for memories and prefer 'happy to get' for a natural expression.

× I would say I come from a developing country, umm, which they do not use much bikes and I would say people are not having umm, a lot of knowledge about using bikes and the umm, uh, benefits or advantages of pollution.

✓ I would say I come from a developing country where people do not use bikes much, and many people do not have a lot of knowledge about using bikes and about the benefits of reducing pollution.

Errors: 'which they do not use much bikes' mixes relative clause and subject incorrectly; use 'where' and correct word order 'use bikes much' to 'do not use bikes much'. 'People are not having a lot of knowledge' uses progressive with stative verb; use simple present 'do not have'. 'Benefits or advantages of pollution' is wrong meaning—should be 'benefits of reducing pollution' or 'environmental benefits'. Suggestion: Use 'where' to refer to places, use simple present for states, and correct the object to convey intended meaning about pollution reduction benefits.

× So I would say, umm, the country I'm living in is always using like cars and other vehicles.

✓ So I would say the country I live in mostly uses cars and other vehicles.

Problems: 'the country I'm living in is always using like cars' is awkward; countries do not 'use' vehicles in continuous progressive; use simple present 'the country I live in mostly uses cars'. 'Like' is filler and should be removed or replaced with 'such as' if examples are intended. Suggestion: Use simple present for habitual facts and remove filler words for clarity.'