Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer does not directly respond to the question (you said “bag” instead of “bike”) and is unclear and ungrammatical. To improve: 1) Answer directly with a clear topic sentence that mentions a bike (or explains you didn’t have one). 2) Use 2–3 supporting details (one sentence each) with linking words (for example, “because” or “so”) to explain why you liked it or who gave it to you. 3) Keep sentences grammatical and avoid unnecessary words. 4) Limit your response to up to 5 sentences. Example improvement steps: state whether you had a bike, mention color/age and who gave it, and finish with a short reason or memory.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small pink bicycle that my mother bought for me when I was six. I loved it because it helped me explore the neighborhood and feel independent. I remember practicing riding every afternoon until I could go without training wheels.

제안: Your answer is understandable but contains grammar and word-choice errors and is too short and vague. To improve: 1) Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + brief reason). 2) Add one or two specific supporting details (who uses bikes, where they are used, or why they are popular) using linking words such as “because”, “for example”, or “so”. 3) Use correct verb forms and plural/singular agreement. 4) Keep it concise (up to 5 sentences).

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are an affordable and convenient way to travel short distances. For example, many students and shopkeepers use bicycles to commute daily, especially in busy city areas. I personally ride my bike to the market most weekends because it is faster than walking and cheaper than taking a taxi.

× Yes, I had a bag when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The student answered about a 'bag' but question asked about a 'bike'; this seems to be a lexical error rather than grammar. However the visible grammar issue is that 'a pink color bag' later is ungrammatical. Suggest replacing 'a pink color bag' with 'a pink bag' or 'a bag that was pink.' Use 'pink' as an adjective directly before the noun: 'a pink bag.' Also ensure the object matches the question: 'bike' not 'bag' if that was intended.

× It was a pink color bag and my mom.

✓ It was a pink bag and my mom helped me buy it.

'Pink color bag' is redundant and unnatural; use 'pink bag.' The phrase 'and my mom' is a sentence fragment; it lacks a verb. Add a verb clause to show what the mother did, e.g. 'my mom bought it' or 'my mom gave it to me.' This fixes sentence structure and adjective use.

× I really like.

✓ I really liked it.

This is a sentence fragment lacking an object and tense consistency. The question referred to childhood, so past tense 'liked' is appropriate. Include the object 'it' to complete the sentence: 'I really liked it.'

× I would say yes by Sir calling popular in my country.

✓ I would say yes; bikes are considered popular in my country.

The original is ungrammatical and unclear. 'I would say yes' is fine, but 'by Sir calling' is wrong. Use a clause like 'bikes are considered popular' or 'people consider bikes popular.' Replace odd vocabulary and structure with a passive or active expression: 'bikes are considered popular' or 'people call bikes popular.'

× Everybody had.

✓ Everybody has one.

'Everybody had' is incomplete and mismatched in tense. If speaking generally about current popularity, use present tense 'has.' Also include the object 'one' (a bike): 'Everybody has one.' If referring to the past, use 'had one.' Ensure number agreement: 'everybody' is singular so use 'has.'

× I personally bike out.

✓ I personally ride a bike.

'Bike' as a verb can be used ('I bike'), but 'bike out' is awkward. Better to use 'ride a bike' or 'I personally ride my bike' to express habitual action. Use present tense for general statements: 'I personally ride a bike.'