Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise, use correct grammar and sentence structure, and add linking words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and fix tense/word form errors (e.g., 'rode' not 'ride', 'the bike' or 'my bike was red').

예시: Yes. I had a red bike when I was a child, and I rode it every day with my friends. We often raced in the park after school, which helped me stay active and made my childhood very memorable.

제안: Remove filler words (uh), make a clear opinion sentence, and provide coherent supporting reasons with linking words. Be specific about who prefers cars and give a clear contrasting point if you mention children. Complete your thought instead of trailing off.

예시: In my view, bicycles are not very popular in my country because many adults prefer to drive cars to work and school due to convenience and poor cycling infrastructure. However, children still often ride bikes for fun in neighborhoods and parks.

× Yes, of course. In my childhood I had a bike and I rode a bike every day, Ride a bike at the time with my friend and my bike color is red.

✓ Yes, of course. In my childhood I had a bike and I rode it every day. I rode with my friend at that time, and my bike was red.

Several tense and sentence structure issues: 'I rode a bike every day, Ride a bike at the time with my friend' is a fragment and repeats the verb; it needs to be combined into complete sentences. 'My bike color is red' uses present tense and awkward word order; when talking about the past you should use past tense 'was' and say 'my bike was red' or 'the color of my bike was red.' Suggestion: keep past tense consistent for childhood events, avoid repeating 'a bike' by using pronouns (it), and split long fragments into clear sentences.

× Nowadays, uh, in my view, uh, bikes are not popular in my country because a lot of people prefer to uh, drive a car uh, for school or work.

✓ Nowadays, in my view, bikes are not popular in my country because many people prefer to drive cars to school or work.

Minor issues with word choice and number agreement: 'a lot of people prefer to drive a car' is awkward because 'people' (plural) should prefer 'cars' (plural) or 'to drive a car' can stay but is less natural. Also reduce filler words 'uh'. Suggestion: use 'many people' and plural 'cars' or rephrase 'to drive a car' to 'to drive to school or work.' Maintain present tense 'are not popular' for current situation.

× And uh, many uh, children, uh, ride a bike and they.

✓ Also, many children ride bikes, and some of them still do.

The original is an incomplete sentence ending with 'and they.' This is a sentence structure error (fragment). Also 'ride a bike' is singular phrasing; use plural 'ride bikes' or 'ride a bike' with clarifying subject. Suggestion: complete the thought by explaining what 'they' do (e.g., 'they still ride bikes' or 'they like cycling'), and remove fillers.