Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Correct factual and grammatical errors, be concise, and keep relevance. Start with a direct topic sentence, then briefly add one specific detail about how you used the bike. Use correct tense and vocabulary (e.g., 'afford me one', not 'afford me wine'). Avoid mixing past and present without clear reason.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents bought me one when I was six, and I used to ride it to the park every weekend, which helped me become confident on the road.

제안: Make the response more natural and precise. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific reasons or examples using linking words (e.g., 'because', 'for example'). Avoid repetition and incorrect pronoun agreement ('they are' not 'it is').

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many cities offer public bike-sharing schemes. For example, you can scan a QR code to unlock a bike and ride it for short trips, which is inexpensive and convenient for commuting.

× Of course I did, My family afford me wine when I was 6 and I often ride bikes now.

✓ Of course I did. My family could afford a bike for me when I was six, and I often ride bikes now.

Multiple grammar issues: (5) Past tense issue: 'afford' should be past simple to match 'when I was 6' and the auxiliary 'could afford' is natural for ability in the past. (11) Incorrect use of prepositions/objects: 'afford me wine' is incorrect meaning; the intended meaning is that the family could afford a bike for the child. Use 'afford a bike for me' or 'could afford a bike' to express purchasing. (1/27) Singular and plural/subject-verb agreement: use 'a bike' (singular) to match purchase; 'ride bikes now' is acceptable but 'often ride bikes now' fits. Also punctuation and sentence structure: split into two sentences and write 'six' as word in formal writing. Suggestion: use past ability 'could afford' and clarify object 'a bike for me'.

× Of course it is.

✓ Of course they are.

Subject-verb agreement error (27): The question asks about 'bikes' (plural), so the answer should use a plural pronoun and verb: 'they are' rather than 'it is'. Use 'they are' to agree in number with 'bikes'.

× In my country there are many public bikes and you can just scan it and you can just ride it.

✓ In my country there are many public bikes and you can just scan them and ride them.

Incorrect use of pronouns and agreement with plural nouns (11): 'public bikes' is plural, so the pronoun referring back must be plural 'them', not singular 'it'. Also avoid repeating 'you can just'; use a single verb phrase: 'scan them and ride them.' This improves cohesion and grammatical agreement.

× It's really good to have public bikes for us.

✓ It's really good for us to have public bikes.

Sentence structure error (26): The original word order is awkward. The correct structure is 'good for us to have' rather than 'good to have ... for us.' This places the beneficiary phrase correctly and sounds natural.