Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and correct grammar, keep it concise and include specific details. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two supporting details using correct adjective order and vocabulary. Avoid unnecessary words and keep under five sentences.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small red bicycle with 24-inch wheels and a comfortable saddle, which I used to ride to school and around the neighborhood.

제안: Answer directly and use present-tense when talking about general popularity. Provide a clear reason with linking words (because, since, however) and specific examples. Remove filler words (umm, uh) and correct grammar (bikes are popular; motorcycles cause pollution). Keep to one topic sentence plus one supporting detail.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in the Philippines because they are affordable and convenient for short trips. Additionally, many people choose bicycles over motorcycles or cars to avoid traffic and reduce pollution.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and it was a color red bike with A4 wheeled.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a red bike with A4 wheels.

Errors: adjective order and word choice. 'a color red bike' is incorrect; the correct adjective-noun order is 'a red bike'. 'A4 wheeled' is ungrammatical; use the noun 'wheels' and place the size before it if needed ('A4 wheels'). Also the original sentence is a run-on combining two clauses with 'and'; better to split into two sentences for clarity. Suggestion: use 'a/an' + adjective + noun and pluralize 'wheels' when referring to bicycle wheel pair, e.g., 'It was a red bike with A4 wheels.'

× I think bikes were popular in my country which is the Philippines umm since since our riding and motorcycle causes a huge uh pollution umm some.

✓ I think bikes are popular in my country, the Philippines, because motorbikes and motorcycles cause a lot of pollution.

Errors: tense and subject-verb agreement. The speaker begins with 'I think' (present opinion) so 'were popular' should be present 'are popular' to match. 'our riding and motorcycle causes' has wrong noun choice and agreement: 'motorbikes and motorcycles' (plural) require 'cause' not 'causes'. Also 'a huge uh pollution some' is ungrammatical; use 'a lot of pollution' or 'huge pollution'. Suggestions: keep tense consistent with the main verb (present for current opinions), match plural subjects with plural verbs (cause), and use clearer nouns ('motorbikes' or 'motorcycles') and quantifiers ('a lot of').