Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct time expression, avoid repetition, and add one specific detail to make the answer natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two supporting details using linking words. Correct small grammar errors (e.g., "when I was about seven" not "7:00"), and remove repeated phrases like "if I remember, I remember."

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father taught me to ride and my parents helped me practise. When I was about seven, I used to cycle around my neighbourhood every afternoon, often stopping to play with friends before lunch.

제안: Organise your answer with a clear opinion then give two specific reasons using linking words. Reduce hesitations and filler words, correct grammar (e.g., "It depends on the region"), and use better vocabulary (e.g., "humid" instead of "sweat"). Keep to 2–3 sentences for clarity.

예시: I don’t think bikes are very popular in my country. This is mainly because many regions are very hot and humid, which makes cycling uncomfortable, and because the roads are often busy and unsafe for cyclists.

× When I was about 7:00, if I remember, I remember I enjoyed cycling around a neighborhood every afternoon and to eat lunch at that time.

✓ When I was about seven, if I remember correctly, I enjoyed cycling around the neighborhood every afternoon and eating lunch at that time.

The sentence has multiple past tense and form issues. '7:00' is better as 'seven' when referring to age. 'If I remember' should be 'if I remember correctly' for clarity. The phrase repeats 'I remember' unnecessarily. Parallel structure requires using the gerund 'eating' after 'enjoyed' rather than the infinitive 'to eat'. Also use 'the neighborhood' for a specific neighborhood context. Suggestion: simplify and maintain past tense consistency and parallel verb forms.

× I would say it not that popular because depend on my uh, country Withers umm, most of it is the really hot and the sweat it make people uncomfortable when we go outside.

✓ I would say it is not that popular because it depends on my country. Most of it is really hot and sweaty, and it makes people uncomfortable when we go outside.

Several present tense and agreement errors: 'it not that popular' needs the verb 'is'. 'depend on my country' requires the third-person singular 'depends' and a clear subject 'it'. 'Withers' appears to be a mispronunciation and should be removed. 'the really hot and the sweat' should be 'really hot and sweaty' using an adjective. 'it make' needs third-person singular 'makes'. Also join clauses with 'and' for clarity. Suggestion: ensure correct present tense forms and subject-verb agreement, and use appropriate adjectives.

× So when we for so when we need to bike, I will say that it's not that popular because of the weather.

✓ So when we need to ride bikes, I would say that they are not that popular because of the weather.

Tense and modal choice: 'I will say' is awkward for a general opinion; 'I would say' or present tense 'I say' is better. 'Need to bike' is informal; use 'need to ride bikes' or 'need to cycle'. Also subject reference: 'it's not that popular' refers to bikes (plural), so use 'they are not that popular'. Maintain consistent modal 'would' used earlier. Suggestion: match number (plural) and choose appropriate modal tense for opinions.