Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and precise: give a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (use adjectives correctly), avoid fillers, and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Keep it under five sentences.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small two-wheeled bike with bright red paint. Moreover, I used it to ride to my friend’s house every afternoon, so I learned to balance quickly.

제안: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (use plural forms and fix word order), remove hesitations, and add a specific reason or example using a linking word. Keep it concise (max 5 sentences).

예시: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country. For example, most children I knew owned at least one bike, and many people use them for short trips because they are cheap and convenient.

× It was a small bike with two wheels. And it was, uh, very speed.

✓ It was a small bike with two wheels, and it was very fast.

The student used the adjective 'speed' incorrectly; 'speed' is a noun, while the sentence requires an adjective or adverb to describe the bike. Use 'fast' (adjective) to describe the bike's speed. Also combine the short clauses with a comma and conjunction for natural flow. Suggestion: replace 'very speed' with 'very fast' and merge into one sentence.

× Uh, yes, indeed. Uh, riding bike is very popular in my, uh, country, uh, because uh, every child around me, uh, had uh, at least one bike in.

✓ Yes, indeed. Riding bikes is very popular in my country because every child around me had at least one bike.

Multiple structural problems: 'riding bike' lacks plural or article—use the gerund phrase 'riding bikes' or 'riding a bike'; 'in my, uh, country' has extra filler and misplaced comma; 'had at least one bike in' has an unnecessary preposition 'in' at the end. Also verb tense 'had' is acceptable if speaking about past general situation, but if referring to present use 'has'. Suggestions: remove filler words, use plural 'bikes' with gerund, remove trailing 'in', and keep consistent tense (use 'has' for present general truth: 'every child around me has at least one bike').

× It's in his child.

✓ It was his childhood.

The phrase 'It's in his child' is ungrammatical and misuses articles and noun forms. The intended meaning is likely 'his childhood' (the time when he was a child) or 'when he was a child.' Use the noun 'childhood' rather than 'child' and correct verb: 'It was his childhood' or better: 'He had it when he was a child.' Suggestion: replace the phrase with 'It was his childhood' or 'He had it when he was a child.'