Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and avoid repetition; start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details using linking words. Correct minor grammatical errors and remove fillers (uh). For example, mention who gave the bike, one or two uses, and one concrete memory or feeling to make the answer natural and specific.

예시: Yes. My grandfather gave me a small, bright blue bike when I was six. I used it to ride to school and visit my friends, and I remember feeling very proud when I learned to ride without training wheels.

제안: Begin with a direct opinion, then support it with two clear, specific reasons using linking words (for example, because / for instance). Avoid fillers and repeat words; use varied vocabulary (commute, exercise, maintain fitness). Include a brief personal example to illustrate your point.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them to commute short distances and to exercise. For instance, I ride my bike to work three times a week to stay fit and avoid traffic.

× It is very beautiful and convenient, which I can use to go to school and go to my friend's house.

✓ It was very beautiful and convenient, which I could use to go to school and to my friend's house.

Tense inconsistency: the question asks about childhood (past), so present tense 'is' and modal 'can' are incorrect. Use past tense 'was' and 'could'. Also add 'to' before 'my friend's house' for parallel structure.

× Moreover, uh, that by also helps me to travel to different places like, uh, going from.

✓ Moreover, it also helped me travel to different places.

The original sentence has unclear words ('that by') and an incomplete clause ('going from'). Correct by removing filler words and using a clear past-tense structure 'it also helped me travel'. This fits the past timeframe and fixes sentence fragmentation.

× In my country, bikes are extremely popular because people also use it to commute and for, uh, doing the exercise every morning.

✓ In my country, bikes are extremely popular because people also use them to commute and to exercise every morning.

Pronoun must agree in number with 'bikes' (plural), so use 'them' not 'it'. Remove unnecessary filler and correct verb form: 'to exercise' is preferable to 'doing the exercise' for natural phrasing.

× From my side, I also use my bike to go to work and also practice, uh, riding to enhance my overall health.

✓ Personally, I also use my bike to go to work and to practice riding to improve my overall health.

'From my side' is unnatural; use 'Personally'. Use 'to practice riding' for correct verb+ing structure and 'to improve' is better than 'to enhance' here. Removed filler 'uh' and redundant 'also'.