Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, avoid repetition, and organize into a clear topic sentence plus 1–2 specific supporting details. Use past tense consistently for past events, replace redundant words (e.g., “but but”), and link ideas with simple connectors (for example, “and” or “so”). Keep it within 3–4 sentences to be more natural.

예시: Yes, I did. My father gave me a bike for my tenth birthday, and I rode it every day to visit my aunt’s house. Once I fell and scraped my knee, but I kept riding because I loved the freedom it gave me.

제안: Correct subject-verb agreement, make phrasing more natural, and add one specific example or reason. Use linking words (“because”, “for example”) to connect ideas and avoid absolute statements like “every household” unless you clarify. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, definitely. Bicycles are commonly used in the Philippines, both for commuting to work and for leisure on weekends, because they are affordable and convenient in crowded areas. For example, many people use bikes to travel short distances in provincial towns.

× Yes I did, my father gave it to me for my 10th birthday and I use it every day to visit places like my aunt's house.

✓ Yes I did, my father gave it to me for my 10th birthday and I used it every day to visit places like my aunt's house.

The sentence describes a past situation (having a bike as a child), so verbs referring to habitual actions in that past period should be in the past tense. 'Use' is present tense; change to 'used' to match the past context. Suggestion: maintain consistent past tense when talking about childhood events.

× 1 memorable moment was when I fell off and scraped my knee using that bike.

✓ One memorable moment was when I fell off and scraped my knee while using that bike.

The sentence begins with '1' (a numeral) which is inappropriate in spoken narrative; write 'One'. Also the phrase 'using that bike' is awkwardly placed. 'While using that bike' clearly links the action to the time it happened. Suggestion: spell out numbers in narrative and use 'while' to indicate simultaneous actions.

× But but then I keep on riding it because I love the freedom it gave me.

✓ But then I kept on riding it because I loved the freedom it gave me.

The sentence mixes present tense 'keep on riding' with a past narrative. For past events, use past tense: 'kept on riding'. Also 'love' should be 'loved' to match the past timeframe. Remove the duplicated 'but'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and avoid repetition.

× Yes, definitely. I think that bikes is commonly used in the Philippines, especially that it is used as a transport for work or as a leisure during a free time.

✓ Yes, definitely. I think that bikes are commonly used in the Philippines, especially as transport for work or for leisure during free time.

Subject 'bikes' is plural, so the verb must be 'are' rather than 'is' (third person singular issue). Additionally, 'as a transport' is better as 'as transport' and 'as a leisure during a free time' is ungrammatical; use 'for leisure during free time' or 'for leisure in free time'. Suggestion: match plural subjects with plural verbs and use 'for' with activities like 'leisure'.

× And I think that it is present actually in every household in the Philippines.

✓ And I think that they are actually present in almost every household in the Philippines.

The pronoun reference and verb number are incorrect. 'It' refers to 'bikes' (plural) so use 'they are'. Also 'present in every household' is too absolute; 'almost every household' is more natural. This is a 'there be' / existence and agreement issue: use plural agreement for plural noun. Suggestion: ensure pronouns agree in number with their antecedents and avoid absolute claims unless certain.