Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Start with a clear direct answer, use correct grammar and concise reasons. Keep under five sentences. Avoid unclear or culturally sensitive statements like "illegal as in the law of God" unless you can explain clearly. Use correct verb forms (e.g., "didn't have a bike", "my parents didn't allow me") and give a specific simple reason (safety, cost, or family rules). Link ideas briefly (e.g., "because", "so").

예시: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. My parents didn't allow me to ride one because they thought it was unsafe for young children. As a result, I usually walked to school or went by car with them. Now I wish I had learned earlier because riding is convenient and fun.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence, then provide specific reasons and examples using clearer linking words. Correct grammar and word choice (e.g., "affordable" not "not too much expensive", "compared to cars or buses", "many people own their own bikes"). Limit to up to five sentences and make details specific (who uses bikes, for what, and a brief example).

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. They are affordable compared with cars and public transport, so many students and workers ride them to save money. Also, they are easy to learn and convenient for short trips in crowded cities. For example, my neighbor cycles to work every day to avoid traffic and save on fares.

× No, when I was shy I didn't have bike because my parents doesn't allow me to use any kind of transport instead of bicycle because it is illegal as in the law of God.

✓ No, when I was young I didn't have a bike because my parents didn't allow me to use any kind of transport other than a bicycle because it is illegal according to the law of God.

Multiple issues: 'shy' is wrong contextually; use 'young' for age. 'bike' needs an article 'a' (article error, but fixed within same correction). Main grammar error: 'my parents doesn't allow' is subject-verb agreement and pronoun/verb form: plural subject 'parents' must take 'don't' or 'didn't' in past tense. Because the sentence refers to the past ('I didn't have'), change 'doesn't allow' to 'didn't allow'. 'instead of bicycle' is incorrect preposition and article usage; use 'other than a bicycle'. 'as in the law of God' is awkward; 'according to the law of God' is clearer. Suggestion: ensure verb tense consistency (past with past), use correct subject-verb agreement, choose appropriate pronouns and prepositions, and include articles before singular countable nouns.

× Yes, I think so. In my country many people use bike because it is not too much expensive as compared to far and it is very easy to learn how to use the bike.

✓ Yes, I think so. In my country many people use bikes because they are not very expensive compared to cars, and it is very easy to learn how to ride a bike.

Problems addressed: singular/plural and article ('use bike' -> 'use bikes'); pronoun agreement ('it is not too much expensive' -> 'they are not very expensive'): 'bike(s)' plural requires 'they' and plural verb. 'too much expensive' is incorrect adverb placement and collocation; use 'very expensive' or 'too expensive'. 'as compared to far' is unclear and incorrect; likely 'compared to cars'. 'how to use the bike' is unnatural; use 'how to ride a bike'. Suggestion: match noun number with verbs/pronouns, use natural collocations for adjectives and compare with appropriate nouns.

× Even in my country many people have their own bike instead of some.

✓ Even in my country many people have their own bikes instead of renting some.

Original errors: 'have their own bike' can be correct but 'many people' implies plural, so 'bikes' is more natural (singular/plural issue). The phrase 'instead of some' is incomplete and unclear; likely intended 'instead of some [other option]' such as 'renting some'. I changed it to 'instead of renting some' to convey contrast. Suggestion: ensure noun number agrees with quantifiers (many people -> their own bikes) and complete comparative phrases with the alternative action or noun.