Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more coherent and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (possessives, articles) and avoid short fragmented sentences. Aim for 3–4 well-formed sentences and include a brief detail (when, who, or a memory) to make the answer engaging.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was about eight years old. I bought it from our neighbor’s child, and it was a small red bicycle with training wheels. I used to ride it around the park every afternoon, which made me feel independent and happy.

제안: Provide a clear opinion first, then give two specific reasons with linking words. Fix grammatical issues (verb forms, articles, plurals) and avoid repetition. Use concrete examples or comparisons (e.g., who uses bikes, cultural attitudes, infrastructure) to support your view.

예시: No, I don’t think bikes are very popular in my country. Mainly children use bicycles for play, because many adults prefer cars and there is little cycling infrastructure. For example, there are few bike lanes in cities, so people rarely choose cycling for commuting.

× I bought it from our neighbor.

✓ I bought it from our neighbor.

No correction needed. The sentence correctly uses the past tense verb 'bought' to describe a past action. Keep as is.

× Like our neighbors child.

✓ It was like our neighbor's child.

Original is a sentence fragment lacking a main verb and missing possessive apostrophe. Add 'It was' to form a complete sentence and use the possessive form neighbor's. Suggested improvement: Always include a subject and verb to make a complete sentence and use apostrophe for possession.

× I really enjoyed using it.

✓ I really enjoyed using it.

No correction needed. The sentence is a complete past-tense statement and fits context.

× So yeah.

✓ So yeah.

Informal discourse marker; grammatically acceptable as a short response. No correction required.

× OK, I think the bikes are not really popular in my country because riding bikes here is not that popular.

✓ OK, I think bikes are not really popular in my country because riding bikes is not that popular here.

Avoid unnecessary definite article with general plural noun 'bikes' and place adverb 'here' at the end for natural word order. Suggestion: Use 'bikes' (no 'the') when speaking generally. Also keep consistent present tense.

× People here not really seeing riding bikes as a sport.

✓ People here don't really see riding bikes as a sport.

Original lacks auxiliary 'do' for negative present simple and uses incorrect progressive form 'seeing'. Use present simple 'don't see' for general truth. Suggestion: Use auxiliary 'do/does' for negatives in present simple and base verb form after it.

× You will find mostly the child.

✓ You will mostly find children.

Wrong singular noun and article usage. Use plural 'children' for general statement and place adverb 'mostly' before verb or after subject. Suggestion: For general facts use plural nouns without 'the'.

× The children have the bikes and playing with it and after time they will forget using it and they.

✓ The children have bikes and play with them, but over time they forget about them.

Several issues: unnecessary definite article 'the' before 'children' if speaking generally, wrong verb form 'playing' should be simple present 'play', incorrect pronoun agreement 'it' for plural 'bikes' should be 'them', and sentence fragment at end. Rephrase to 'play with them' and 'forget about them'. Suggestion: Ensure subject-verb agreement, use plural pronouns for plural nouns, and complete the clause structure.