Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Clarify the main idea with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar and vocabulary, and keep it concise (1–3 sentences). Say directly whether you had a bike, give one brief reason, and avoid irrelevant words. Use correct verb tense and nouns (e.g., 'bike' not 'back' or 'pie').

예시: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because my family couldn’t afford one. As a result, I usually walked to school or shared rides with neighbors.

제안: Give a direct answer, then support it with one or two specific details using linking words (e.g., 'because', 'for example'). Reduce filler words (umm, like) and correct tense/agreement. Be more precise about what makes bikes popular (culture, events, convenience).

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them for short trips and exercise. For example, there are regular community cycling events and races that attract large groups of riders.

× I don't have a back when I was a child because growing up you don't have enough money to buy a pie and buy course not 19 when I was at a young age.

✓ I didn't have a bike when I was a child because growing up we didn't have enough money to buy one.

This sentence has incorrect pronoun use and multiple other tense and word errors. 'I don't have a back' should be 'I didn't have a bike' (wrong word and wrong tense). 'You don't have enough money' uses the generic 'you' inconsistently with first person; use 'we' or 'I' to match 'I didn't have.' Also 'buy a pie and buy course not 19' is incorrect wording and unclear; replace with 'buy one' to refer to a bike. The tense must be past (I didn't have) to match 'when I was a child.' Suggestion: keep subject consistent (I or we), use correct noun 'bike', and use past tense for past events.

× Yes, but it was very popular in our country.

✓ Yes, they are very popular in our country.

The question asks about current popularity, so the present simple tense should be used. Using 'it was' is past tense and singular; 'bikes' is plural. Change to 'they are very popular' or 'bicycles are very popular' to match number and present time frame.

× Umm, sometimes there was even an event wherein there is umm, like race, you know, in they gather a lot of people and they bike together.

✓ Sometimes there is even an event where there is a race; people gather and ride bikes together.

Multiple errors: 'wherein' is formal and awkward here; 'there was' vs 'there is' should match present context so use present 'there is a race.' 'in they gather' incorrectly uses preposition 'in' and wrong word order; use 'people gather.' 'bike together' uses the verb 'bike' but 'ride bikes together' is clearer. Also maintain tense consistency in present simple for habitual events.