Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Focus on a clear topic sentence, coherent supporting details, correct grammar, and keep it concise (no more than 3–4 sentences). Correct tenses and articles, remove filler words, and use linking words (e.g., however, but, because) to connect ideas. Specifically: 1) Start with a direct answer: “No, I didn’t have a bike as a child.” 2) Give one or two specific supporting details (who’s bike you tried, whether you learned). 3) Use past tense consistently and correct verbs (e.g., taught, learned). 4) Finish with a brief concluding remark.

예시: No, I didn’t have a bike as a child. I did try my cousin’s and a friend’s bikes a few times, but I couldn’t ride them properly. A recent memory is my little cousins teaching me how to balance, but I still haven’t mastered it.

제안: Provide a clear opinion with specific reasons and link them using cohesive devices. Improve grammar (use plural/singular correctly and smoother phrasing). Expand slightly with one specific example (e.g., infrastructure, weather, culture) while staying within 3–4 sentences. Use linking words like however, because, for example.

예시: Yes, bikes are fairly popular in my country, especially for short trips and among students. However, they are not used as much for commuting because many roads are not bike-friendly and there are few dedicated bike lanes. For example, busy main roads and heavy traffic make cycling unsafe in many cities.

× Hi, I didn't have a bike as a child, but I do remember trying my cousin's bike, my friend's bike and during the time that I was trying nearby I still could not do it.

✓ Hi, I didn't have a bike as a child, but I do remember trying my cousin's bike and my friend's bike, and at that time I still couldn't ride it.

The sentence mixes past continuous and awkward time expressions. Change 'during the time that I was trying nearby' to 'at that time' for clarity and fluency; use the contracted past negative 'couldn't' to match past context. This keeps the past tense consistent and improves natural phrasing.

× My recent M memory of a bike is when my little cousins teach me how to do it.

✓ My most recent memory of a bike is when my little cousins taught me how to ride it.

Use past simple 'taught' (past participle/past form) because the event happened in the past. Also 'most recent' is correct instead of 'recent M', and 'ride' is the correct verb collocation for bikes.

× Unfortunately, until now I still.

✓ Unfortunately, even until now I still can't ride a bike.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks a main verb and object. Add 'can't ride a bike' to complete the thought and use 'even until now' or 'still' to express the ongoing inability.

× Yes, I do think bikes are popular in my country. However, I think that it is not widely used as there are roads are not bike friendly.

✓ Yes, I do think bikes are popular in my country. However, I think they are not widely used because many roads are not bike-friendly.

Use 'they' to refer to 'bikes' (pronoun agreement) and 'because' to express reason. Remove the duplicated 'are' and use the adjective 'bike-friendly' with a hyphen. This fixes preposition/connector misuse and improves subject-pronoun clarity.