Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Bạn nên trả lời rõ ràng, mạch lạc và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp/vocabulary. Cụ thể: (1) Bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề ngắn gọn trả lời trực tiếp (Yes/I did). (2) Tránh lỗi từ vựng sai (ví dụ 'fruit' và 'bite' không phù hợp) — dùng 'proud' hoặc 'excited' và 'others' hoặc 'classmates'. (3) Viết tối đa 3–4 câu, thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể (loại xe, kỷ niệm) và dùng liên từ đơn giản nếu cần. (4) Sử dụng thì quá khứ nhất quán (bought, made me feel).

예시: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a small red bicycle for my tenth birthday, and I felt really proud and excited. I rode it to school and around the neighborhood almost every day, which helped me make new friends.

제안: Bạn cần tổ chức câu rõ ràng, sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và dùng từ vựng phù hợp. Cụ thể: (1) Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trực tiếp (Yes/No/It depends). (2) Dùng 'depends on age group' thay vì câu lộn xộn, sử dụng danh từ đúng ('adolescents', 'adults'). (3) Trình bày 2 lý do cụ thể (học sinh đi học, người lớn tập thể dục) với liên từ như 'because' hoặc 'for example'. (4) Tránh những cụm từ mơ hồ như 'dependable problem' — nói rõ ý nghĩ (common or less common).

예시: It depends on the age group. Bicycles are quite popular among schoolchildren who use them to get to class, and some adults also ride bikes regularly for exercise and to avoid traffic. However, in big cities many people prefer motorbikes or cars, so overall bike use varies by location and age.

× As a kid my parents bought me a bike as a birthday present and in that time I feel really really happy and fruit because in my class no one can have a bite like me.

✓ As a kid my parents bought me a bike as a birthday present and at that time I felt really, really happy and proud because in my class no one had a bike like me.

Original sentence mixes past and present tenses and contains several wrong word choices. Use past tense 'felt' to match 'bought' and 'at that time' instead of 'in that time'. 'Fruit' is incorrect word choice; the intended word is 'proud'. 'Can have a bite like me' is incorrect; correct is 'had a bike like me'. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense for past events and choose accurate vocabulary.

× Well I think it's depends on the group of ages because in my country bikes are usually used by adolescences who study in the school.

✓ Well, I think it depends on the age group because in my country bikes are usually used by adolescents who study at school.

Errors: 'it's depends' wrongly uses contraction plus verb; correct is 'it depends' (subject 'it' + present verb 'depends'). 'Group of ages' is unnatural; use 'age group'. 'Adolescences' is the wrong form; correct noun is 'adolescents'. Use preposition 'at school' not 'in the school' for general attendance. Suggestion: use correct subject-verb form and standard collocations.

× Or maybe is this use by the adder who want to who want to take the exercises to? Improve their health.

✓ Or maybe it is used by adults who want to exercise to improve their health.

Multiple problems: 'is this use by' is incorrect word order; correct passive is 'it is used by'. 'Adder' is wrong word; intended 'adult'. Repetition 'who want to who want to' should be single 'who want to'. 'Take the exercises to' is ungrammatical; say 'exercise' or 'exercise to improve'. Suggestion: simplify structure: 'used by adults who want to exercise to improve their health'.

× So this is really a dependable problem.

✓ So this is really a debatable issue.

'Dependable problem' is incorrect collocation and meaning. Likely intended 'debatable issue' or 'dependant problem' isn't appropriate. If meaning is that popularity depends on group, 'debatable issue' or 'a matter of opinion' fits. Suggestion: choose accurate collocation: 'debatable issue' or 'a matter that depends on age group'.