Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer grammatically correct, more concise, and add a clear topic sentence plus one specific supporting detail. Use past tense consistently and link ideas with a short connector. Keep it under five sentences.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I often rode it with friends and family on weekends, especially around the neighborhood park, which was about a ten-minute walk from my home.

제안: Begin with a clear opinion, then give specific reasons and one example. Use linking words (however, because, for example) and avoid repetition. Keep sentences concise and correct small grammar errors (e.g., "carry our bikes" not "carry out").

예시: I think bikes are fairly popular in Hong Kong, but mainly for short trips. Because space in urban areas is limited, people often take bikes to the New Territories for cycling; for example, many families bring folding bikes on the MTR to reach cycle paths.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was a child I usually go out to cycle with my friends and family when I am free.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I usually went out cycling with my friends and family when I was free.

The student mixes present tense with past context. 'When I was a child' requires past tense: 'have' -> 'had' and 'go' -> 'went'. Also 'go out to cycle' is better as 'went out cycling' for natural phrasing. Split into two sentences for clarity.

× I would think bikes are popular in Hong Kong because in Hong Kong we don't really have a lot of place to ride our bikes outside.

✓ I think bikes are popular in Hong Kong because we don't really have many places to ride them outdoors.

'Would think' implies conditional/unnecessary tentativeness; 'I think' is more direct. 'A lot of place' is incorrect: use plural 'many places'. 'Ride our bikes outside' is wordy; 'ride them outdoors' is more natural. Also avoid repeating 'in Hong Kong' twice.

× We usually need to go to New Territories to really ride the bikes.

✓ We usually need to go to the New Territories to actually ride bikes.

Use article 'the' with 'New Territories'. 'Really ride the bikes' is awkward; 'actually ride bikes' is clearer. Remove unnecessary 'the' before 'bikes' when speaking generally.

× So essentially we have to carry out bikes on the MTR.

✓ So essentially we have to carry our bikes on the MTR.

'Carry out bikes' is incorrect word order and 'out' is unnecessary. The correct phrase is 'carry our bikes'. Also ensure 'MTR' reference is appropriate; grammar correction focuses on pronoun placement and word order.