Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repeating words (e.g., "neighbor" twice) and unnecessary information ("in the gym" is odd for bikes).

예시: No, I didn’t own a bike as a child. However, I learned to ride on my neighbor’s bicycle, and we often practiced together around our block, which helped me become confident on two wheels.

제안: Provide a direct topic sentence followed by two specific reasons with linking words. Use more precise vocabulary (e.g., "mode of transport," "eco-friendly," "health benefits") and correct small grammar issues ("environmentally friendly").

예시: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. For one thing, they are a common mode of transport in cities, and moreover they are environmentally friendly and promote regular exercise, which benefits people’s health.

× I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but I was able to ride a bike because my neighbor had a bike and my neighbor and I used to play with the bike in the gym.

✓ I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but I could ride one because my neighbor had a bike and we used to play with it in the yard.

The sentence uses 'was able to' which is grammatically correct but sounds unnatural for habitual or general ability in the past; 'could' is the normal choice for past ability. Repeating 'bike' and 'my neighbor and I' is redundant; replace with pronouns and a single noun. 'In the gym' is unlikely for children's bike play; 'yard' or 'street' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'could' for past ability, use pronouns to avoid repetition, and choose a realistic location.

× Yes I do. Bikes have been popular in my country, in fact it is one of the transports here.

✓ Yes, I do. Bikes are popular in my country; in fact, they are one of the main forms of transport here.

The original mixes present perfect ('have been popular') with a general present statement; simple present 'are popular' is clearer for a general fact. 'It is one of the transports' is incorrect because 'bikes' is plural and 'transport' is an uncountable noun here or should be 'forms of transport.' Use plural pronoun 'they' to agree with 'bikes.' Suggestion: use simple present for general facts, ensure subject-pronoun agreement, and use 'forms of transport' or 'means of transport.'

× And yeah, it is environmental friendly and it's good for people's well-being.

✓ And yeah, it is environmentally friendly and it's good for people's well-being.

The phrase 'environmental friendly' incorrectly uses the adjective 'environmental' before another adjective. The correct adverbial form is 'environmentally friendly.' Suggestion: use 'environmentally friendly' when describing how something affects the environment.