Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb tenses, and avoid redundant words. Add one or two specific supporting details (e.g., how you used the bike or a memorable moment) using a linking word to make it coherent.

예시: Yes, I did. I had a Kawasaki bike that my father gave me for my first birthday. It was small and bright red, and I learned to ride it in the park near our house, which made me feel very independent.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and follow with a specific reason and an example. Use correct articles and word forms, and use a linking word to connect your reason to the example.

예시: Yes, definitely. Motorbikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient for students. For example, many young people buy bikes after finishing school so they can commute to college or work more easily.

× Uh yes, I have a bike when I was a child and I have Kawasaki bike which was gifted by with my father on my 1st birthday.

✓ Uh yes, I had a bike when I was a child and I had a Kawasaki bike which was gifted to me by my father on my first birthday.

The speaker is referring to past events, so present tense 'have' is incorrect; use past tense 'had'. Also correct 'gifted by with my father' to 'gifted to me by my father' to show the recipient and remove extra preposition; spell out 'first'. Suggestion: consistently use past tense for childhood events and use 'gifted to me by' for passive gift expressions.

× Yes, definitely, the bikes are very popular in my country as many of the students or youngsters have to purchase bike when they pass out their schools.

✓ Yes, definitely, bikes are very popular in my country as many students or young people purchase a bike when they finish school.

Avoid unnecessary definite article 'the' before 'bikes' when speaking generally; use plural 'bikes' without 'the'. 'Students or youngsters' is awkward; use 'students or young people' or just 'students'. 'Have to purchase bike' is incorrect: use 'purchase a bike' (count noun needs article). 'Pass out their schools' is incorrect idiom and grammar; use 'finish school'. Overall adjust present tense usage and noun and article forms to express general truth.