Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details (e.g., what type of bike, where you rode it, or a short memory). Avoid redundant words like “the child” and filler sounds.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and I loved riding it. It was a small red bicycle with a bell, and I used to ride with my friends around the neighborhood every weekend.

제안: Give a direct opinion, then support it with two clear, specific reasons using linking words. Remove hesitations and incorrect words. Use accurate vocabulary like “public transportation” and “private cars.” Keep it to two or three sentences.

예시: Yes, bikes are somewhat popular, but not as common as in many European countries. This is because many people prefer public transportation or private cars for convenience, and the city infrastructure does not always have safe bike lanes.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was the child and I loved my bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and I loved it.

The phrase 'the child' is incorrect; 'a child' is the correct noun phrase here (article error and sentence structure). Also repeating 'my bike' is redundant; use the pronoun 'it' to avoid repetition. Suggestion: use indefinite article 'a' for nonspecific nouns and replace repeated noun with an appropriate pronoun.

× Yes, but not as, not as much as uh, popular in European countries, uh, because of the umm, uh, because people uh, prefer to use uh, public trust, uh, portation or uh, personal vehicles, uh.

✓ Yes, but they are not as popular as in European countries because people prefer to use public transportation or private vehicles.

The original sentence has fragmented structure, disfluencies and incorrect phrase 'not as, not as much as ... popular'. Fix by using the comparative structure 'not as popular as in...'. 'Public trust, portation' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'public transportation'. 'Personal vehicles' is better expressed as 'private vehicles'. Remove filler words (uh, umm) and redundant clauses. Suggestion: form a clear comparative clause: 'not as popular as in European countries' and use correct noun phrases 'public transportation' and 'private vehicles'.