Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Clarify tense and meaning, produce a direct topic sentence, use 1–3 supporting details, and avoid repetition. Keep answer natural and concise (no more than 5 sentences). For example, start with: “Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.” Then add one or two specific details linked with connectors (e.g., “and,” “so,” “because”).

예시: Yes — I had a bike when I was a child. I rode it home from school every day, and sometimes I practiced tricks with my friends, so we spent most afternoons outside. It was an old blue bicycle that my parents bought for me on my eighth birthday.

제안: Answer directly and expand with clear, specific reasons using linking words. Avoid filler words like “uh” and finish your thought. Provide 1–2 specific supporting details (statistics, comparisons, or examples).

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among children and teenagers because they are affordable and useful for short trips. For example, many students cycle to school and families often buy bikes for weekend outings, so cycling remains a common pastime.

× Yes, I have a bike when I try and crying riding a bike after after school is also my hubby.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child; I tried to ride it after school, and sometimes I cried when I couldn't.

Errors: incorrect tense (student asked about past), incorrect verb forms ('have' should be 'had'), awkward and incorrect phrases ('try and crying riding a bike', 'after after', 'my hubby' makes no sense). This is a sentence structure error (ID 26) and present/past tense error (ID 6 and 5). Suggestion: Use past tense consistently for past situations (had, tried, cried), use clear verb structures (subject + past verb + object), remove irrelevant words (hubby) or replace with appropriate word if intended.

× Yes, especially for children under 18. Uh, because.

✓ Yes, especially among children under 18, because bikes are affordable and practical for short trips.

Errors: sentence fragment ('Uh, because.' leaves reason incomplete) and slight preposition choice ('for children under 18' is acceptable but 'among' is more natural here). This is a sentence structure error (ID 26) and incorrect use of prepositions (ID 11). Suggestion: Complete the reason clause when saying 'because' by providing a full explanation; use natural prepositions like 'among' or keep 'for' with a full clause.