Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more natural, avoid tense inconsistency and redundancy, add a clear topic sentence, and provide one specific supporting detail. Use a past tense consistently and link sentences with a connector if needed.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My dad bought it for me on my seventh birthday, and we often rode together around our neighborhood every weekend. Because the area was quiet and safe, I learned to ride confidently by the time I was eight.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence, provide a specific reason or example, avoid fillers like "like" and uncertain phrases such as "if that's what you call it." Use linking words to connect idea and give one clear example or statistic.

예시: Yes, I believe bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them for both commuting and leisure. For example, my little brother joins community cycling events every month, and cities often organize weekend group rides that attract hundreds of participants.

× My dad bought me a bike and we usually go biking around the neighborhood.

✓ My dad bought me a bike and we usually went biking around the neighborhood.

The sentence mixes past and present tense: 'My dad bought me a bike' is past, so the following clause describing habitual action at that past time should also be in the past. Change 'we usually go' (present) to 'we usually went' (past habitual). This keeps tense consistent. If you mean it still happens now, keep present for the second clause and clarify by saying 'and we usually go biking around the neighborhood' but then the first clause could remain past as it describes the purchase. Choose consistent tense for clarity.

× I think so since there are a lot of bikers, including my little brother, and they usually go on like a marathon if that's what you call it.

✓ I think so, since there are a lot of cyclists, including my little brother, and they usually take part in something like a marathon, if that's what you call it.

The original has informal and awkward phrasing: 'bikers' is acceptable but 'cyclists' is more natural in this context. 'Go on like a marathon' is ungrammatical: use 'take part in' or 'participate in' with 'a marathon' or say 'ride in something like a marathon.' Also add a comma after 'I think so' for clarity. This correction fixes preposition and verb choice and makes the sentence more idiomatic.