Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise, accurate and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, avoid irrelevant or incorrect details (e.g. “practice how to write” is unclear), use one or two supporting details and a linking word to show sequence. Keep answers to no more than 4–5 sentences.

예시: No, I didn’t have my own bike when I was very young. When I was about six or seven, my mother bought a bike for my brother, and I often borrowed it to learn how to ride. I practiced in our backyard for a few weeks until I could balance and pedal confidently.

제안: Answer directly and give specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid hesitations and vague phrases. Explain why bikes are popular (cost, convenience, environment) and give a clear example or comparison. Keep it natural and within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient for short trips. For example, many people ride bicycles to work or the market since traffic can be heavy and parking is limited. Also, bike-sharing schemes in cities have made cycling even more common.

× When I was little I didn't have the opportunity to own a bike, but later on when I was about 6 or 7, my mom got one for my brother which I'll usually use to practice how to write.

✓ When I was little I didn't have the opportunity to own a bike, but later on when I was about six or seven my mom got one for my brother which I would usually use to practice how to ride.

The original sentence contains incorrect verb forms and word choice. 'I'll usually use' mixes future and habitual meaning; use 'I would usually use' or 'I usually used' for past habit. Also 'write' is incorrect contextually; the correct verb is 'ride'. Use 'six or seven' written consistently and remove the comma before 'my mom' for better sentence flow. Suggestion: use past habitual 'I usually used' or 'I would usually use' to match past timeframe and replace 'write' with 'ride'.

× Umm, of course bikes are very popular in my country. I mean, it's one of the, uh, most used public transportation we have here. People use them for things like everyone's, yeah.

✓ Umm, of course bikes are very popular in my country. I mean, they are one of the most commonly used means of public transportation we have here. People use them for many everyday tasks.

Problems: 'it's one of the, uh, most used public transportation' is ungrammatical because 'transportation' is an uncountable noun and 'one of the most used' needs a plural noun or a phrase like 'most commonly used means of public transportation'. 'It's' should agree with 'bikes' (plural), so use 'they are' or rephrase. 'People use them for things like everyone's' is incomplete and unclear; replace with 'many everyday tasks'. Suggestion: use 'most commonly used means of public transportation' and a complete phrase for examples.