Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be careful with grammar, article use and verb tense. Start with a clear topic sentence that answers directly, then add one or two supporting details using linking words. Use past tense consistently for childhood events, include articles (a/an/the), and avoid short fragmented phrases.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small red bicycle with a bell and training wheels, so I felt confident riding it. As a result, I often rode to my friend’s house after school and practiced cycling every weekend.

제안: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence and give specific reasons using linking words. Use complete sentences and avoid vague fragments. Offer a brief contrast or example to support your opinion and use appropriate vocabulary (bicycles, motorcycles, cars, practical, common).

예시: I don’t think bicycles are very popular in my country because most people prefer cars and motorbikes for convenience. For example, cities are crowded and public bike lanes are scarce, so many commuters choose motorbikes or cars instead.

× Yes, I have bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

This sentence has two issues: article use and tense. The student used no article before the singular countable noun 'bike' where 'a' is required. Also the question asked about the past ('Did you have... when you were a child?'), so the past tense 'had' should be used instead of 'have'. Correction: use the indefinite article 'a' and change present 'have' to past 'had' to match the context.'

× When I was a child it was a red colour.

✓ When I was a child, it was red.

The phrase 'a red colour' is wordy and slightly odd in this context; native speakers usually say 'it was red.' Also add a comma after the time clause for clarity. The adjective 'red' directly modifies 'it' (the bike). Suggestion: use 'it was red' for natural phrasing and include punctuation to separate clauses.'

× No, not very practical, particularly with the car.

✓ No, they are not very practical, particularly compared with cars.

The original response lacks a clear subject and uses an unclear comparison 'with the car.' Use 'they' to refer back to 'bikes' and make the comparison explicit with 'compared with' or 'compared to cars.' Also maintain present tense to answer the general question about popularity. Suggestion: include the subject 'they' and a clear comparative phrase.'

× And cycles are not much common here.

✓ And bicycles are not very common here.

'Not much common' is ungrammatical. Use 'not very common' or 'rare' for correct modification of the adjective 'common.' Also 'cycles' can be replaced by 'bicycles' for clarity. Keep present tense for general statements. Suggestion: use 'not very common' to correctly quantify the adjective.'

× More like motorbikes.

✓ People here prefer motorbikes.

'More like motorbikes' is a sentence fragment lacking subject and verb. Make it a complete sentence by specifying the subject ('people here') and a verb ('prefer'). This clarifies who prefers motorbikes and fits the conversational context.'

× I know cars.

✓ I mean cars are more common.

The phrase 'I know cars' is incorrect here; the student likely meant to clarify or restate that cars are more common. 'I mean' can introduce the clarification, followed by a full clause 'cars are more common.' This fixes the unclear pronoun/verb usage and creates a complete, context-appropriate sentence.'