Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise, accurate, and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using correct vocabulary and linking words. Avoid unclear or incorrect words (e.g., ‘failed and escaped my knee’, ‘write confidently’) and limit your answer to no more than five sentences. For this response, correct the intended meaning (probably a fall and a scraped knee, learning to ride) and use linking words like “but” or “so” to show sequence and result.

예시: Yes. I had a small pink bicycle as a child and I enjoyed riding it around our neighborhood. Once I fell and scraped my knee, but my older siblings encouraged me to keep practicing, so I learned to ride confidently.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence, then add specific reasons and an example with smooth linking words. Fix grammar and word order errors (e.g., “use usually use” → “usually use”, “carry things” → “carry heavy items”). You could also briefly mention any exceptions to show balance (e.g., some people cycle in cities). Aim for 2–3 sentences with varied vocabulary like “convenient,” “commuting,” and “errands.”

예시: Not really. Most people in my area prefer cars because they are more convenient for long distances and carrying heavy items, so families usually use them for shopping and commuting. However, some people in big cities still cycle for short trips and exercise.

× I once failed and escaped my knee, but my older siblings encouraged me to keep practicing until I could write confidently.

✓ I once fell and scraped my knee, but my older siblings encouraged me to keep practicing until I could ride confidently.

The original sentence uses incorrect verbs: 'failed and escaped my knee' is ungrammatical. The intended meaning is that the student fell and injured/scraped their knee. Use 'fell' (past tense of fall) and 'scraped' to describe the minor injury. Also 'write confidently' conflicts with the context of riding a bicycle; it should be 'ride confidently'. Ensure verbs match the activity and remain in past tense to match the narrative.

× In my region most people prefer driving cars because it's more convenient for long distances and carry things.

✓ In my region most people prefer driving cars because it's more convenient for long distances and for carrying things.

The phrase 'and carry things' lacks proper parallel structure and a preposition. After 'convenient for long distances' the second reason should mirror form: 'for carrying things'. 'For' before the gerund maintains parallelism and correct prepositional use.

× For example, families use usually use cars for shopping and commuting.

✓ For example, families usually use cars for shopping and commuting.

The adverb 'usually' is misplaced and duplicated ('use usually use'). Place adverbs of frequency before the main verb (or before the auxiliary) to form a correct sentence: 'families usually use cars'. Remove the extra 'use' to avoid repetition.